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[edit] Xanadu House

3rd self-nomination. Since it was last in FAC, it has been copy-edited and greatly improved based on previous suggestions. It has been through FAC twice before, and has been through peer review once. Archives: Peer review, FAC 1, FAC 2. Your comments are always appreciated. Thanks — Wackymacs 11:10, 6 November 2005 (UTC)

  • Object. Four of the nine main sections are one paragraph long; two more are a very short two paragraphs. Sections should be at least three paragraphs long in general. There are a number of short one-sentence paragraphs as well. —Bunchofgrapes (talk) 17:24, 6 November 2005 (UTC)
  • I've fixed these issues, hopefully, is it any better now? — Wackymacs 07:55, 7 November 2005 (UTC)
  • Objection struck, the structure looks a lot better now. (Some might still have a problem with the "Xanadu book" section; I don't.) I don't have the time to do a full review right now to decide on support or not. —Bunchofgrapes (talk) 16:01, 7 November 2005 (UTC)
  • Object for now, great subject but there are a few things missing or that need clarification. Why does the History section begin with Before creating Xanadu House, Bob Masters designed and created inflatable balloons to be used in the construction of the house.- shouldn't we first be introduced to Masters and how he came up with the idea? How did Mason get involved? There is no explaination - he just appears and helps Bob out.
This section confuses me The Kissimmee house did not endure the elements well, suffering greatly from mold and mildew throughout the interior. The basement flooded with brownish water approximately a foot deep; in the basement were the utilities which controlled the electric and microcomputers.; were these problems common thoughout the time it existed, or only after 2001? If they were ongoing problms this section should go in the disadvantages part of the article (I was going to move it there- but its not clear when these were a problem)
There are also some other queries in the text.--nixie 02:48, 8 November 2005 (UTC)
  • It does say how Mason got involved in the 5th paragraph of the History section Disney opened the Experimental Prototype Community of Tomorrow to compete with the Xanadu attraction. As a result Bob Masters found architect Roy Mason in 1980 at a futures conference in Toronto, to design the second Xanadu, I have changed the start of the History section text slightly based on what you have said. Thanks — Wackymacs 07:27, 8 November 2005 (UTC)
  • I think that the number of fair use images should be reduced too- all those interior shots seem excessive. Otherwise I Support the article.--nixie 12:14, 10 November 2005 (UTC)
  • Object for now. I think there should be a little bit more on the end of the History section about why and how these were shut down. I don't understand what "storage use" means, or if it needs to be mentioned. Also, the day-by-day updates (on October 6 this happened, and October 10th this happened) should be removed and summarized. All in all, great article though! —Cleared as filed. 03:17, 8 November 2005 (UTC)
  • It already says why they were shut down, because the technology was obsolete and they were losing popularity. I have slightly changed the wording in the end of the History section based on what you have said. Thanks. — Wackymacs 07:27, 8 November 2005 (UTC)
  • I also think now that the Bob Masters link should either be removed, unless we think he's notable enough in his own right aside from his participation in the Xanadu House project. No need to have a red-link that's very unlikely to ever become an article. —Cleared as filed. 12:31, 10 November 2005 (UTC)
  • Comment- in the history section, more context of modern and contemporary architecture would be helpful. As for influences on this project, I've highlighted your link to Kisho Kurokawa-- but discussion of more, and better known architects than Jacques Beufs Jacques Rougerie like Buckminster Fuller, Peter Cook & Archigram, even Frank Lloyd Wright the Bauhaus school and Le Corbusier-- all obvious and direct influences, might make a featured article. Also, your closing statement of the introduction, "The Xanadu Houses were some of the last experimental houses ever built,...", is prediction. See Frank Gehry, Greg Lynn and many others for the continuity of experimental houses and architecture after the 80's. -Davidrowe 05:33, 11 November 2005 (UTC)