Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Tropical Depression Ten (2007)
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- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was promoted 17:48, 22 May 2008.
[edit] Tropical Depression Ten (2007)
I'm actually excited for this one. I believe this article deserves to be featured, as it will provide a standard for future articles on weak storms. Thus, it will feature those such storms. This is the first FA nomination on a tropical depression, which is the weakest of all tropical cyclones. The depression formed near Florida last September, and quickly dissipated. It has passed the GA criteria and A-class criteria, and I personally believe it also passes the FA criteria. Though it might seem short, it is longer than our shortest FA, and the article is comprehensive in dealing with the topics associated with the depression. Here goes nothing. ♬♩ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:05, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
- I'd like to see the lead expanded into two paragraphs if possible.
- Convection gradually became better organized, with a well-defined band in its eastern semicircle and intermittent thunderstorm activity near the center. Despite its overall poor organization, with a poorly-defined circulation...—This is making no sense to me. Firts, you say it's beginning to organize, and it has a well-defined bandind feature, but then you go on to say it's poorly organized.
- The circulation became better defined as convection modestly increased over the center, and within 6 hours of its development the system transitioned into a tropical depression.—MoS breach?
- The tornado destroyed 20 homes, left 30 others severely damaged, and injured one person, and caused power outages for about 300 people.— You could probably remove the first "and", as it bogs down the sentence.
- Also, seriously, shouldn't preparations go before impact, instead of between it?
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- Lede expanded. That sentence I clarified, as the convection was somewhat organized, but the overall structure, including circulation and outflow, was poorly organized. Fixed the next two points. For the impact section, I felt the need to have the Eustis tornado mentioned first, since it happened before the system became a depression. Then, I listed preps, which were followed by impact. ♬♩ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:40, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
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- Support Alright, looking much better. Well done. Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 10:40, 17 May 2008 (UTC)
Comments
- Current ref 10 "David M Roth "Tropical Depression #10" is lacking a publisher. I believe it's NOAA?
- In the real picky department, you sometimes put the author/publisher like Reuters first in the bibliographical entry, sometimes after the title. Can we stick with one system?
Support with one little quibble.
- In the storm history section, third paragraph, the verb in the first two sentences is "was forcasted" which is repetitious. Consider changing one.
- Otherwise reads well to me. Ealdgyth - Talk 15:48, 17 May 2008 (UTC)
- Thanks a lot. I got that. ♬♩ Hurricanehink (talk) 00:51, 18 May 2008 (UTC)
- Support - Article is terrific, it fulfills all of the featured article criteria. This will serve as a great model for writing articles on tropical depressions. Hello32020 (talk) 21:49, 19 May 2008 (UTC)
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