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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 18:16, 18 February 2008.

[edit] Tenacious D

previous FAC

Self nomination. This is a stable WP:GA-rated article that has had a Peer Review. Assertions are cited, and descriptions do not verge on the waffley (brevity is... wit).

Tenacious D Fan (talk) 11:10, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

Comment. "or "The D" as they are also known by fans", in the first sentence of the lead, seems out of place. Try not to get into specifics too early (we technically don't know what Tenacious D is yet, so it seems strange to talk about fans). CloudNine (talk) 11:37, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

  • "Initially Gass felt threatened by Black". Why?

Oppose at the moment.

  • Check the external links - several are dead (see this page).
  • Present should be present in the heading, per WP:HEAD. Probably doesn't need the capitalisation in the infobox either.
  • "at the time" repeated in consecutive sentences, also some punctuation seems to have gone missing!
    • Removed one instance of "at the time". Will check through punctuation. Tenacious D Fan (talk) 18:31, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
  • "While Gass initially felt threatened by Black, they eventually worked out their differences," the second statement isn't a logical run-on from the first.
  • Too many short paragraphs in the opening sections, consider a merge and improvement in flow.
  • "In an interview on BBC Radio 1 aired on January 18, 2006, with Colin Murray," - with Colin Murray should come after interview.
  • "Gass described " and "Black posits" about the same interview, tense change.
  • Isn't there a more visually elegant way of crowbarring in the audio clip?
  • Again, throughout the 2004 to present section, far too many mini-paragraphs. Almost list-like set of statements.
  • Appearances have no references.
  • "shrivs"? relevance?
  • "Black said the Iraq War "felt so wrong", since, in his words, it had "nothing to do with Osama bin Laden".[63] Gass said of the state of the U.S. administration: "It’s a bad time for the U.S. government", and had expressed surprise that Tony Blair was still the Prime Minister of the UK.[16]" - these are personal opinions and don't appear to relate to Tenacious D - they could be placed in Black and Gass' articles, but not here.

Good luck. The Rambling Man (talk) 13:08, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

  • Oppose: quoting rambling man + only 2 imgs? --jskellj - the nice devil 13:35, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
  • Oppose Sorry, there are some problems to kink out before this is ready. The thing that stands out the most it the [citation needed] template that has been there since August of last year. That is not all though. With citation templates, articles shouldn't really be GA, that informs me that there is inacurate info. —Burningclean [Speak the truth!] 22:25, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
  • Oppose The article has many issues. There is unsourced information everywhere, the genres seem to change every 5 minutes and the article is not of FA quality. Read Nirvana (band). That is an article of FA quality. This article just skimmed GA. Thanks for reading, ThunderMaster UTC 14:39, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
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