Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Southern Vectis/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 15:56, March 23, 2008.

[edit] Southern Vectis

Self-nominator I think its ready, it has had a peer review, and editors have acted on the advice given there. It is of an appropriate length, offering a range of interesting facts about the subject with easy readability. Wightbus796 (talk) 20:23, 20 March 2008 (UTC)

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Arriva436 134

Editor5807 99

Peeky44 19

Wightbus796 15

• Oppose: the references are not correctly formatted, and I've counted ten dead external links on the link checker. The article also needs a copyedit, for example:
  • "Island" vs. "island": both appear in the lead, with no indication as to why some are capitalised and some aren't.
  • I'm spotting some incorrect punctuation in the image captions. See the MOS.
  • The seasons (summer and winter) need not be capitalised.
  • "Most Island towns receive a 24 hour service, linking to Newport." Should be "a 24-hour service".

It's worth taking to WP:LoCE, and having another go with later on. Chwech 19:56, 22 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose This article is not ready for FA. Examples:

• "Southern Vectis Omnibus Co. (Part of Southern Vectis PLC) is the dominant bus operator on the Isle of Wight, it later spawned off and formed the Eastleigh and Southampton bus company Solent Blue Line." - two improperly joined sentences
• "This includes single and double deck buses, as well as open top buses." - not a stand-alone sentence
• "In 1986 it was purchased by its management" - so, the people who own it now bought it? this imparts no information - who?
• "Each of the new Citaros have a phrase" - subject verb disagreement
• "they will be the first full size single deck buses to be bought by the company since 1976." - why future tense, when there's a picture of one of these buses in action right next to the paragraph?
• The bus route table in the Current operations section is way too much information for an article about the company
• The table 'Allocation for bus liveries' is incredibly garish and impossible to read
• The links in the See also section are already present within the article text
• The references are entirely unformatted; online references need publisher names and access dates at the very least
• Eleven of the reference links do not work.

Note that the article was put up for peer review, but generated no feedback. Maralia (talk) 04:38, 23 March 2008 (UTC)

• Withdrawing nom, as the significantly principle editor agrees it is not ready for FAC.[1] SandyGeorgia (Talk) 15:53, 23 March 2008 (UTC)

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