Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Rhys ap Gruffydd

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[edit] Rhys ap Gruffydd

Self nomination. I believe this article meets the criteria for a Featured Article. It has been peer-reviewed at the Military history Wikiproject and has been graded A-Class here and at WikiProject Biography. I have also had it copyedited. Rhion 09:21, 26 August 2006 (UTC)

  • Support Well written and sourced. Aesthetically pleasing. Good use of fully sourced quotes. Great article. Raymond Palmer 14:01, 26 August 2006 (UTC)
  • Support, excellent article in every respect. Kirill Lokshin 15:19, 26 August 2006 (UTC)
  • Support — Fantastic article on all grounds. Definite FA quality. Ryu Kaze 16:17, 26 August 2006 (UTC)
  • Comment - lead image needs sourcing. Jkelly 20:55, 26 August 2006 (UTC)
I have added the source details. Rhion 21:12, 26 August 2006 (UTC)
Looks good. Jkelly 21:51, 26 August 2006 (UTC)
  • Support Great article and an excellent read. Kyriakos 21:25, 26 August 2006 (UTC)
  • Comment The introduction is exceedingly long, and contains information that belong in the article itself. Lemegeton 20:01, 28 August 2006 (UTC)
Three paragraphs is recommended for an article of this size as per WP:LEAD, which also states that the introduction should be able to "stand on its own as a concise version of the article". Rhion 05:20, 29 August 2006 (UTC)
Per above. The lead conforms with WP:LEAD and the repetition is sometimes necessary, since the article must "stand on its own as a concise version of the article:.--Yannismarou 16:34, 29 August 2006 (UTC)
The lead is supposed to contain an overview of the article, and should avoid containing too specific information. That belong, as I mentioned before, in the article itself. Lemegeton 18:32, 29 August 2006 (UTC)
I agree that the lede contains a bit of fat that should be trimmed, although "exceedingly long" is an exaggeration. Consider this sentence: "In 1194 Rhys was defeated in battle by Maelgwn and another son, Hywel, who imprisoned him in Nevern castle, though Hywel later released his father." We don't really need to know that Hywel later released Rhys' father. In fact, I'd say we don't even need to know about Hywel or Nevern castle. "In 1194, Maelgwn's forces defeated Rhys and imprisoned him" would suffice. If you like, Rhion, I'll take a stab at editing the lede, but you're probably in a better position than I to judge which information is vital. 207.7.97.132 18:48, 29 August 2006 (UTC)
Sorry, I didn't realize I'd been logged out. Peirigill 18:50, 29 August 2006 (UTC)
OK, I've cut a few sentences from the lede. Feel free to reduce a bit more if you feel it's required. Rhion 19:05, 29 August 2006 (UTC)
  • Support. Great article. Very well written. -- Underneath-it-All 03:31, 31 August 2006 (UTC)