Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/One Hot Minute

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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted 03:02, 26 November 2007.

[edit] One Hot Minute

Another Chili Peppers album up for promotion. This one has probably had the most outside review before nomination. Passed as a GA one month ago and since then I've been ironing out a few kinks while Grim-Gym executed a thorough copyedit. Overall, I'm pretty confident in this one. Questions, comments and concerns will be dealt with immediately. NSR77 TC 18:35, 16 November 2007 (UTC)

  • Support - As a contributor to the article, I know the article thoroughly and endorse it. I must add however, that I've mentioned to NSR that the sample of "Coffee Shop" needs to be removed and replaced with "Warped". The latter is mentioned directly in-prose and thus would better meet fair-use criteria. -- Grim (talk) 19:08, 16 November 2007 (UTC)
If anyone is willing to upload it, I'd be very grateful. NSR77 TC 19:26, 16 November 2007 (UTC)
Done. xihix(talk) 03:37, 17 November 2007 (UTC)
  • Support - had to iron out a couple of unusual grammar constructions but very good flow of prose. Only odd bit I didn't touch was One Hot Minute contains far darker, more suicidal and less sexual themes than previous records - more suicidal? Suicidal is a highly specific concept and I find it hard to believe there'd be so much around self-harm directly. The more general term nihilistic or just leaving as darker captures sombre/negative mood better if that is what is meant. cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:20, 16 November 2007 (UTC)
  • Comment - I didn't know you were taking this to FAC yet. There's still stuff I wanted to add to the article; nothing so essential the article is lacking without it, but rather that adds some detail to the whole affair. In particular I have Navarro quoted as outright saying there were songs on the album he didn't like. WesleyDodds (talk) 05:49, 17 November 2007 (UTC)
I think that would be really good to add. cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 06:36, 17 November 2007 (UTC)
I'm going away in a week or so for a while, so it was now or never. NSR77 TC 15:41, 17 November 2007 (UTC)
  • Comments - The article has a few prose issues:
  • The 2nd sentence of the lead uses "successful" twice.Y Done
  • It also integrated use of heavy metal guitar riffs. - isn't there a "the" missing?Y Done
  • and received a far better response from critics. - change to "and received far more critical acclaim.Y Done
  • Navarro was fired from the band due to creative differences in 1997. - the paragraph would flow better if there was a "Subsequently," at the beginning of this sentence.Y Done
  • despite producing three successful hits change to despite producing three hit singles.Y Done
  • Isn't "The band's previous album," in the 2nd para of the lead redundant since its been mentioned already?Y Done
  • Stunned, the Chili Peppers had no plans as to who could replace Frusciante, hiring Arik Marshall to finish out the remaining dates after being forced to reschedule. - needs to be rewritten. Maybe "Stunned, the remaining Chili Peppers, who had no idea about a suitable replacement for Frusciante, hired Arik Marshall to play the remaining dates after being forced to reschedule."Y Done
  • Several weeks prior he had a dental procedure change to "he had had a dental procedure"Y Done
  • He returned to Hollywood in late January, - include "1995" there to remind the reader of the time frame.Y Done
  • Because Kiedis had resumed heavy drug use and ... - Cannot start a sentence with "because".Y Done
  • which he both sung and played bass on. to "which he also both sang and played bass on.".Y Done
  • His writing style in Jane's Addiction were independent from other contributors, whereas the Red Hot Chili Peppers were far more of a collaborative group - "His writing in Jane's Addiction was independent from other contributors, whereas the Red Hot Chili Peppers was a far more collaborative group"Y Done
  • Navarro himself noted the band's dynamic was more even than that of Jane's Addiction, which was often dominated by frontman Perry Farrell. - to "Navarro himself noted that the band's dynamic was more than that of Jane's Addiction, which was often dominated by frontman Perry Farrell." But can a band's dynamic be "more" than another's? Y Done
  • as a way to break the monotony - to as a way of breaking the monotonyY Done
  • since then it has gone 2x multi-platinum in the United States to and has since gone 2x multi-platinum in the United States Can "2x multi-platinum" be replaced by something like "double platinum"?Y Done
  • Some however, praised the record. to "Some, however, praised the record."Y Done
  • When the U.S. leg ended. Umm, leg may not be the best word to use there when you just talked about a broken foot :D.Y Done
  • Months went by without any scheduled concerts. One Hot Minute was not selling as well as the band expected. - Rewwrite that into one sentence... Reads like 2 random disconnected sentences now.Y Done
  • By April 1998, the band had not written any new material, so Kiedis and Flea decided it was time to fire their guitarist. to "By April 1998, the band had not written any new material; Kiedis and Flea decided it was time to fire their guitarist."
  • necessary to call it quits is not encyclopedic.Y Done
  • He made one last attempt to keep the band together, by asking Frusciante to rejoin. - remove "by".Y Done

Phew! I think other than these issues, the article is excellent and tells an interesting story. Good job Tommy Stardust (talk) 11:34, 17 November 2007 (UTC)

    • Alright, I believe I've fixed everything. Some of this stuff I wasn't even aware was here as I've been pretty busy off-Wikipedia these days. Thanks a lot! NSR77 TC 16:02, 17 November 2007 (UTC)
  • Comment - What about note 7 and 8?Y Done Skizzik (talk) 11:49, 17 November 2007 (UTC)
    • Fixed! Didn't even see that! NSR77 TC 16:02, 17 November 2007 (UTC)
  • Support — Quality article. No problems with the writing or references as far as I can see. (Ibaranoff24 (talk) 15:41, 18 November 2007 (UTC))
  • Support - Very nice article. It's an album I don't enjoy as much as the other albums, because of the problems the members and the then-gone Frusciante were going through, but this is definitely great. Good job! xihix(talk) 02:13, 20 November 2007 (UTC)
  • Oh yeah, I forgot I didn't support yet :) Tommy Stardust (talk) 08:01, 20 November 2007 (UTC)
The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.