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[edit] Ohio

This is a great page with a large effort towards integrity with many references. (The preceding unsingned comment was added by Leoberacai at 03:56 UTC, 9 May 2006)

• Object. There are several issues which needs to be addressed with this article:
  • The lead section does not provide an accurate overview of the article as a whole, and also contains some one-sentence paragraphs which should either be merged or expanded.
  • The article lacks inline citations of its references.
  • The article has too few references, seven references is not an adequate number to fully source a topic as diverse and broad as the entire state of Ohio.
  • Especially toward the end, the article is very list-heavy. As many of these lists as possible should be converted into prose.
  • Some of the sections are not comprehensive:
    • The law and givernment section is only one or two sentences long, containing little more than a link to another article.
    • The economy section mentions nothing of the economic decline which took place in the Midwest, especially Ohio, during the post World War II period and continuing on until today.
    • The history section in the main article only covers up until 1835, and then gives a link to another article. The history section should give a brief overview of the complete history of the State, with a link to an article which is a longer and more detailed version of the history section presented in the main article.
  • In general, the article contains many one-sentence paragraphs and examples of shaky writing. It needs to be copyedited.

There is a lot of information here, is just needs some polishing, better referencing, and rewriting. RyanGerbil10 04:14, 9 May 2006 (UTC)

• Object:
• History ends at 1835, certainly not comprehensive
• Law and government is a section stub
• This article should follow guidelines at WP:STATE
• See alsos at the end of sections should be incorporated into text
• Too list-weighty towards end
• Needs more inline citations; 7 for a 30kb article isn't sufficient
• Image:Wiki ohio.jpg and Image:Ohio state seal.png need fair use rationales
• Subpages should be created, in accordance with WP:SS. For example, Geography of Ohio, etc.
• The WP:LEAD skips around from topic to topic and doesn't summarize the article.

Thanks, AndyZ _t 23:29, 9 May 2006 (UTC)

• Object:

We don't need a populated U.S. State with nothing Extremely Important as our Featured Article,(My family is from Ohio), it should be used on something more Interesting. --Corporal Punishment 02:31, 10 May 2006 (UTC)

unless I'm missing something this objection is not exactly actionable. Rossrs 14:40, 10 May 2006 (UTC)

This objection is unactionable. Certain featured articles aren't interesting, but as long as they fit into requirements laid out at WP:WIAFA, they can become featured articles. Thanks, AndyZ _t 19:42, 10 May 2006 (UTC)

• Object - the postage stamp image Image:Wiki ohio.jpg should be removed. It's only fair use if the stamp itself is being discussed, but here it's used for decorative purposes. Fair use images should not be needed in an article like this - a Wikipedian with a camera should be able to capture whatever images are needed. A fair use rationale will not suffice in this case. Rossrs 14:39, 10 May 2006 (UTC)

• Object per above. See WP:LEAD, and there's really no excuse for any unfree content in this article. Jkelly 01:02, 13 May 2006 (UTC)