Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Mazie Hirono/archive1

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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 16:20, 3 August 2007.

[edit] Mazie Hirono

I think this article illustrates one of the best points of Wikipedia. It is very well developed and the value of the article's quality meets many standards. Self-nom. naskgetty (talk) 22:29, 29 July 2007

  • Oppose. From a quick glance I can see that the lead is pretty short and, more worryingly, there is a severe lack of sources. The brevity of the article would also make me suspect it is missing something. --Lenin and McCarthy | (Complain here) 01:08, 30 July 2007 (UTC)
    • Furthermore, "self nom" indicates you have worked on the article. From your contributions I'd say you haven't. --Lenin and McCarthy | (Complain here) 01:13, 30 July 2007 (UTC)
  • Oppose The sources should be properly cited, i.e. author, date, title - not just the URL. --thedemonhog talk • edits 02:33, 30 July 2007 (UTC)
    • ok I fixed the sourcesnaskgetty 09:19, 30 July 2007 (UTC)
      • I made some minor changes. The majority of sentences in the "Early years," "Legislative career," "Lieutenant Governor" and "Gubernatorial Campaign of 2002" sections should have references. The article has a lot of potential once you get those sources. --thedemonhog talk • edits 20:02, 31 July 2007 (UTC)
  • Oppose: Many sections of the article are very short and seem to be lacking complete coverage such as the section on Hirono's legislative career. Also, a lot more things should be sourced. -- Underneath-it-All 15:59, 30 July 2007 (UTC)
  • Oppose - commendable effot, but this doesn't even meet good article criteria: MOS issues; one sentence paragraphs and one paragraph subheadings; improper date formatting; few inline citations; and the article needs a thorough copyediting.--Esprit15d 16:05, 30 July 2007 (UTC)
The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.