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[edit] Laser

I think this page is quite comprehensive with all nescasary links and quite relvant images. —The preceding unsigned comment was added by Masterofhogets (talk • contribs) .

• Comment: The article looks well written overall but I definetely think "References" section needs to be improved, since the article contains so much technical information. – Tutmøsis (Talk) 00:17, 24 April 2006 (UTC)

• oppose for now. The section on misconceptions is almost completely missing sourcinng and a lot of other sections are short on citations. Other than that it looks good to me. JoshuaZ 04:36, 24 April 2006 (UTC)

• Object - Insufficient lead section, insufficient references, and inconsistant referencing (use of external links within the article itself while also using the footnote system). Fieari 07:59, 24 April 2006 (UTC)

• Object - For the following reasons:
  • What means hue? -- the link redirect to color
  • Awkward sentence: "Laser action is understood by application of quantum mechanics and thermodynamics theory (see laser science)."
  • Too many parentheses, e.g.:"(discovered by Albert Einstein while researching the photoelectric effect)" could be easly rephrased in order to improve the flow.
  • Some sentences are too complicated/technical, e.g.: "The pump energy is absorbed by the medium, producing excited states. When the number of particles in one excited state exceeds the number of particles in some lower state, population inversion is achieved." This does not mean anything if the reader cannot imagine what "pump" mean.
  • The authors seem to consider the reader should know what is a quantum state, what is a photon etc... It should definitively be more pedagogical particulary in the first paragraph following the lead. Vb 12:46, 25 April 2006 (UTC)