Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/LSWR N15 class

• The class had a highly-complex build history that spanned several years of construction from 1919 onwards. -- The onwards is redundant and there are many examples of redundancy in the article.
• From then on, they became more generally known as the King Arthur class. -- more redundancy.
• He incorporated a considerable number of improvements, notably to the steam circuit -- Many improvements.
• Constituting a development of Robert Urie's H15 -- this sounds odd.
• It was the Urie-designed chimney that was to cause draughting problems, -- This is the first we read of the problem, - The chimney caused problems - is better.
• a situation revealed with the intensification of the LSWR timetables. The locomotives - - the problem arose?
• The locomotives gained a reputation of being poor steamers -- for their being
• with crews reporting steadily falling steam pressure -- and the crews reported
• which improved efficiency by using less steam to move the piston -- because it used
• and therefore -- I think one has to go.
• A larger diameter chimney and blast-pipe were two of the improvements made, resulting in a fast, free-steaming locomotive. -- which resulted
• What is a valve event?
• cylinder diameter further reduced -- was further reduced
• necessitating -- requiring
• utilised -- used
• P14 classes, and differed from the Urie batch in using higher boiler pressure and smaller cylinders -- in their use of
• Whilst -- while
• their construction in Glasgow gaining them the 'Scotch Arthurs' nickname -- gained them
• and differed from previous batches in having an Ashford-style cab. -- in their having or and had
• They were built at Eastleigh in 1926, the smaller tender allowing those fitted to be turned on the shorter turntables to be found on this part -- smaller tender allowed and the to be is redundant.
• 'From 1926 the N15 class became the first -- In 1926
• From 1926 the N15 class became the first in Britain to be equipped with smoke deflectors. Several designs were tried, 772 being initially equipped with those of the German style. -- would a semicolon be better here?
• Upon -- on
• improving performance yet again -- which further improved performance
• though -- although
• regular -- 'common
• a factor that was commented upon -- which was commented on
• Despite this, they were to be found in most areas
• but their high numbers - because there were so many
• various -- different
• and the entire class was so modified
• After a period of 18 months

There are other examples. Please don't just address these, but get a fresh pair of eyes to do some copy-editing. GrahamColm^Talk 17:30, 27 May 2008 (UTC)

• • Changing to support for a much improved article. Thanks for putting-up with me. GrahamColm^Talk 18:06, 30 May 2008 (UTC)

• Phew! I'm going to have to wind-up my proof-reading a notch!
  Seriously, though, thank you for providing much food-for-thought. EdJogg (talk) 19:01, 27 May 2008 (UTC)

• • Image:SR King Arthur poster 2.jpg: Why is prose alone insufficient for "discussion of construction of the locomotive class" (WP:NFCC#1)? This image does not appear to have anything to do with development; articulation and/or demonstration of an "investment" of £600,000 does not seem to require a fair use image. Image use appears purely decorative (NFCC#8). Image has an incomplete rationale (NFCC#10C and WP:RAT). {{Non-free poster}} license requires "critical commentary on the film, event, etc. in question or of the poster itself, not solely for illustration". There is no such critical commentary.
    • Removed as it was not doing anything for the article. --Bulleid Pacific (talk) 20:26, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
  • Image:30783 Sir Cillemere Eastleigh 1950.jpg: Image's source asserts "All Images are copyright. Non commercial use of the images from this section of the Planefacts web site is permitted". We cannot accept non-commercial only images per WP:IUP, WP:TAG and Jimbo.
    • Please read the 'According to this' wikilink below the GNU license, which is an email from the copyright owner granting permission for the image's use on Wikipedia. --Bulleid Pacific (talk) 20:26, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
  • See WP:MOS#Captions regarding punctuation for incomplete sentences. ЭLСОВВОLД _talk 18:46, 27 May 2008 (UTC)