Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Japan Airlines/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 04:16, 23 October 2007.

[edit] Japan Airlines

I nominate Japan Airlines as a FA because this is a well established article, providing information to air commuters and air junkies all the base information to Japan Airlines. This article is in a neutral state and is quite stable for the moment. It is neat and attractive article and should be considered as a featured article on Wikipedia. Aflumpire 05:31, 18 October 2007 (UTC)

Comment It has some things that need to be attended to. It has a notice for additional citations for verification still. Also the refs do not extend all through the article. In the section Services-inflight entertainment and beyond there are simple links to external sites that might be converted to refs.--Sandahl 01:21, 19 October 2007 (UTC)

• Object: I cannot in good faith vote yes to this article as 1) there is a {{Refimprove|date=June 2007}} tag on it 2) What is their net income and net revenue 3) Numerous others that I don't have the time to mention at this moment. Learnedo 20:25, 19 October 2007 (UTC)

• Object: Article is undercited, and most citations are not formatted properly. I find some strange text, such as where it says Japan Airlines is the largest in Asia in the lead, then the next sentence tells us it's the largest in Japan. Doesn't this necessarily follow? Large potions of this article are made of lists and hard to read. Captions need to be improved, per Wikipedia:Captions. Pagrashtak 21:09, 19 October 2007 (UTC)

• Comments Object
  • List in the intro is not good.
  • "..has the largest fleet of Boeing 747s in the world (approximately 76, as of March 2005)" I've two problems with this, first "approximately" is not satisfactory and second the data is over two years old.
    • I have partially fixed this; I found a recent article giving the size of the fleet of 747s, but not on whether it is the largest in the world or not. Dabomb87 03:07, 23 October 2007 (UTC)
  • "IATA's Operational Safety Audit for its safety practices.[3]" There's a few words missing is there there not?
  • Companies should be refered to as singular, e.g. bought their first jet > bought its first jet.
  • In the "Deregulated era" history section - three sentences are about 1997 and they drag on - also... also...
  • No need for "Previously operated" section sentence to have a bullet point. Also consider whether the section above requires bullet points.
  • "In the future, Japan Airlines is looking forward to the possibility of ordering 747-8 aircraft." This is uncited. Also clumbsy language - Should be something like JAL is considering ordering the Boeing 747-8.
  • "The average age of Japan Airlines fleet is 12.1 years, as of April 2006.[8]" -- again could be more up to date.
  • Overlinking, especially numerous links of aircraft types.
  • Numerous direct web links, i.e. not in <ref></ref>
  • Pictures in no sort of order. The three pics are all in the history section but are all modern aircraft. No pics in the fleet section.Mark83 13:04, 20 October 2007 (UTC)
    • So far away & no attempt to work on points above. Changed to oppose. Mark83 08:41, 22 October 2007 (UTC)

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.