Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Itanium/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 01:59, 24 July 2007.

[edit] Itanium

Nom restarted (old nom) Raul654 16:56, 28 June 2007 (UTC)

• Comments from Universe=atom:
  • Section 5 needs references, as there are currently none in a potentially challenge-able subject.
  • "...10 of the November, 2006 list of..." (section 6) Comma needed after 2006.
  • "...with 10160 Itanium 2 (1.5 GHz) CPUs." (section 6) Comma needed in thousands' place in numbers.
  • "The groups are: [point-wise list here]" (sub-section 2.1) A colon should never follow a verb, as it currently does. It should be changed to something like "The groups are as follows:" or "There are several groups:"
  • "Intel has released two processor families using the brand: Itanium and Itanium 2." (intro) Two mistakes are here: The same colon one as the previous one. Also, the two brands should not be in bold.
  • "As of 2007 Itanium is the fourth-most..." (intro) Comma needed after 2007.
  • "As of 2007 Itanium is the fourth-most deployed microprocessor architecture for enterprise-class systems, behind x86-64, IBM POWER, and SPARC." (intro) Reference needed.

I will add more points later if I can find them. If all of them are taken care of, I will vote "Support." Universe=atom^{Talk•Contributions} 11:30, 2 July 2007 (UTC)

• Strongly Support Very well written. --akc9000 ^{(talk • contribs • count)} 20:55, 2 July 2007 (UTC)
• Support - as the article's GA reviewer. Huge improvements. Giggy _U^CP 03:51, 12 July 2007 (UTC)
• Oppose. Citations are sparse. Spamsara 11:45, 12 July 2007 (UTC)
• Oppose Some citations aren't placed immediately after punctuation marks. Only full dates or dates with a day and a month should be wikilinked. The phrases "the majority of" and "a number of" are too wordy and could be replaced by the words "most" and "several". "Currently, modern chipsets for Itanium are manufactured by HP" - I don't think it's necessary to use both the words "currently" and "modern". Why is Itanium italicised in some places but not others? "The architecture is based on explicit instruction-level parallelism, with the compiler making the decisions about which instructions to execute in parallel." - this could be better phrased. I think it would be useful to get the article copy-editted by someone who hasn't seen it yet. Epbr123 23:37, 17 July 2007 (UTC)

• I have no idea why this was restarted. Please remove the dots from non-sentence captions, as per MOS. I suppose it's OK overall. Tony 05:03, 19 July 2007 (UTC) PS Check through for glitches like "2x128"—space it and use a multiplication sign, not an ex. Click on it below the edit box. Tony 05:06, 19 July 2007 (UTC)

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