Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Harry and the Potters/archive2

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 00:51, 7 December 2007.

[edit] Harry and the Potters

previous FAC

I'm self-nominating this article for featured article because.. it is of good article status, it has undergone a peer review and recently was not promoted as a featured article candidate. I have taken all comments and suggestions from these reviews and edited the article accordingly. Hpfan9374 (talk) 11:20, 30 November 2007 (UTC)

Comments: The article needs further copyedit. {1} Repetition in paragraph1: "formed in... 2002" and "Formed in 2002"; {2) Within para1 and para2, the band is italicized, then not, then it is. (3) "Wizard rock" is wikilinked in para1, so doesn't need to be in para2. (4) at least one year is missing a comma directly afterwards: " Almost three years later in February 2002 the band". (5) "easy likeability"; is there such a thing as "difficult likeability"? (6) "the band's musical style was goofy inept pop-punk". (7) "Harry and the Potters lyrics' contain...". (8) "They have also they have co-founded..." Wishing you well in the FAC process. Rosiestephenson 19:52, 30 November 2007 (UTC)

Comment The article has recently requested a copyedit by Wikipedia:WikiProject League of Copyeditors. Hpfan9374 00:56, 1 December 2007 (UTC)

Oppose The previous FAC closed November 26th, 4 days before you renominated this article. FAC is not a revolving door. Go work on the article and address the problems and take your time. Also, the references are a mess, see WP:CIT, and use the proper templates and all the information you can find about the source and include them in the article. KnightLago 20:13, 1 December 2007 (UTC)

Comment. I have worked on the article and addressed all problems, using wikipedians suggestions from GA reviews, peer reviews and FAC candidate comments. Also, the article is using the correct reference templates. Hpfan9374 00:00, 2 December 2007 (UTC)

You haven't addressed all problems since it closed four days ago because they are still there. The lead is still choppy and redundant. The prose is not brilliant nor written from a strategic distance. When reading this article I get the impression it was written by a band member. Also, I suggested you check the citation templates so you could find out what you are missing, which includes access dates and publishers among other things. KnightLago 03:31, 2 December 2007 (UTC)

Comment. Very well, I shall edit accordingly. Thankyou. Hpfan9374 03:56, 2 December 2007 (UTC)

• Oppose The prose needs a lot of work before this can be made an FA.
  • "formed in Norwood, Massachusetts in 2002"..."Formed in 2002"
  • "Harry and the Potters music"
  • The band alternates between being a plural and singular entity.
  • The prose in general is clunky and choppy, and sprinkled with grammatical errors. The tone also seems unencyclopedic at times.
  • Per MOS, a band should not be italicized.
  • Careful of overlinking.
  • Fully flesh out your refs. 140.247.131.86 19:47, 4 December 2007 (UTC)
• Comment - I agree with Rosiestephenson (talk · contribs) and KnightLago (talk · contribs), specifically, about the need for formatting the references. Especially if some citations are standardized and others are not, best to use WP:CIT for all citations in the entire article. Cirt (talk) 12:40, 5 December 2007 (UTC).

• Closing note: Please allow several weeks before re-nominating at FAC; seeking a peer review or third party assistance may be helpful. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 00:51, 7 December 2007 (UTC)

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.