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[edit] Glacier

Non-self-nom. Nice, well-rounded article with lots of free pictures (especially the diagrams by User:Luis María Benítez). —Keenan Pepper 00:53, 27 October 2005 (UTC)

• I went through and cleaned up all the typos and grammar problems that I could find. In my opinion, there is still much work to be done in the writing department. I noticed a lot of style problems (switching back and forth between present, past, plural, singular, etc.) The article looks fine content-wise, just not writing-wise. If you went through, section-by-section, and tried to convey the same content with better, more fluid writing, it would work. — BRIAN0918 • 2005-10-27 01:10
  • I've edited the first few sections for style issues and removed a lot of redundancy. Tomorrow I'll finish polishing it up. —Keenan Pepper 05:25, 27 October 2005 (UTC)
    • Maybe it's my green text on black background, but the diagrams look oddly placed in the article, like they were tossed in at the end. You might try giving them all the same width throughout the article and/or switch some from right-side to left-side. I'm not sure. — BRIAN0918 • 2005-10-27 05:33
• Object:
  1. Needs a through proofreading.
  2. Too many one-sentence and two-sentence paragraphs.
  3. The red-linked technical terms need articles, or they need to be defined in the text.

  --Carnildo 06:01, 27 October 2005 (UTC)