Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Genghis Khan/archive1

From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

[edit] Genghis Khan

I think this is a good article on Genghis Khan, clearing a lot of elusive understanding of Genghis Khan on the web. Also this article ranks 4th on Google if you search "Genghis Khan." I think it covers a lot of information and is quite cohesive in terms of many ways. - User:168.253.16.87 18:54, 12 Feb 2005

• Object.: Good article, but: 1) The four web-based references should be formatted according to the formatting guidelines found here: Wikipedia:Cite sources. 2) The article is pretty long and exhibits a strange structure: it begins with an account of his early life, followed by Values of Genghis Kahn, a moral portrait that should be more extensively sourced because it contains a lot of strong statements about his personal beliefs. Next is a section called Mongols before Genghis Kahn, a section I think could be disposed of. There is already a separate article, and the information in it is only remotely related to Genghis Kahn himself. Uniting the tribes and the two next sections continue Gengis Kahn's biography started 2 sections before, this time concentrating on military achievements. The structure then completely spins out of control with Political achievements, a rather shallow section with some overlap with the self-confessed stub subsection Politics in the Organization section. Perceptions of Genghis Kahn and Legacy should be merged somehow and moved to the end, as the perceptions covers modern-day perceptions more than contemporary ones. 3) I would like to see this article copy-edited. The tone and language is acceptable, but it could easily be made more fitting for an encyclopedia article if someone was willing to spend some time on it. Phils 18:43, 12 Feb 2005 (UTC)