Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Ford Taurus/archive4

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 07:15, 4 September 2007.

[edit] Ford Taurus

Mar 06 FAC, Dec 05 FAC , Jan 07 FAC

I have put a lot of work into this article, such as rewriting most of it, referencing everything, as well as wikilinking, restructuring, as well as other changes. I think that now after all of these changes, mainly with the removal of POV and the addition of many references, that this article is finally ready to be featured, so I am again putting it up for FAC. Nomination and support Karrmann 00:12, 30 August 2007 (UTC)

Oppose Sorry :) I do think this is a very comprehensive and apparently thoroughly referenced article which covers an important car in recent American automotive history, and Karmann has put a lot of work into it. I recently peer reviewed the article. The vast majority of my comments have been taken up (not that my comments have any special status!), but I have one remaining, vital, concern: the writing is not of FA standard. There is quite a lot of unclear, or non-standard, phrasing. In places the words could be compressed significantly for the same meaning - the most an obvious example being the first two paras of 'Fifth generation'. The article needs a good copyeditor with fresh eyes (not one of the regular contributors) to go through it in depth to clarify the structure and writing, streamline the text and fix errors. In some cases that may mean doing more research to allow particular phrases or claims to be made more specific. I also suggest that it would be helpful if the copyeditor was not from North America and had no particular interest in cars. With this done, which will not be a minor task, I would be happy to support the article. 4u1e 09:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.