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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 15:57, 18 December 2007.

[edit] Dick Rifenburg

I'm nominating this article for featured article because it was quickly promoted to WP:GA and has improved since then. I think this is an interesting Bio. TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 18:03, 10 December 2007 (UTC)

Comments
  • in 1944 and1946-1948. red links are distracting and there is a missing space
    • I fixed the space, but I believe we are expecting articles for most of these season, which I think suggests we should leave them linked. If this is not the case let me know.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 17:53, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
  • It is ironic that - is an awful way to start a section, you havent told us where and when he was born in the body YesY--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 17:53, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
  • High School - should the s be capitalized? You use "high school" in the article YesY--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 18:52, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
  • Image:Wben-logo.jpg needs a fair use rationale
    • I have done what I can. I am waiting for User:Cbl62 to fill in the source, since he found the image.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 19:42, 11 December 2007 (UTC
      • It is not looking good for this image. Cbl62 does not know anything about the source. I have put a call into his son about getting an image for the page. I ended up getting his daughter-in-law on the phone and hope the message got through.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 21:00, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
  • Rifenburg died in December 1994 at age 68. - how? old age? heart attack? accident? M3tal H3ad (talk) 05:33, 11 December 2007 (UTC)

Comments:

The date ranges should use unspaced endashes, not hyphens - I spotted at least 2 (in the lead and the infobox), but there could be more.YesY--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 20:06, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
The infobox still has a hyphen, but that's in the template, not the article, so I see no reason for the template's fault to detract from this. The template could be fixed easily enough - I didn't do so, since consensus would probably be needed among its users. Carre (talk) 15:09, 15 December 2007 (UTC)
In College, I don't think "12 -to-7" is the usual way of expressing scores. Isn't it normally something like "12–7"?
You are referring to a direct quote. See the link.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 19:59, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
Ooops, so it is - apologies. Annoyingly, I spotted that "6-ft. 4" was in the quote, and didn't comment on it... Carre (talk) 20:03, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
Conversions from US units to metric: the article does the conversions in the High School section, but not elsewhere.
It is common in sport not to convert between yards and meters. American football is a case where WP:UNITS might say "conversion would make a common expression awkward".--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 20:19, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
OK Carre (talk) 15:09, 15 December 2007 (UTC)
I just fixed a couple of typos, so a quick run through checking for more would be worthwhile, I think.YesY--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 22:09, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
In College again, is "All-All American teams" another typo? I haven't the faintest idea, so I didn't change it.YesY--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 20:33, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
"However, sportswriters of that era had a bias against Michigan at that time" - "of that era" and "at that time" seems redundant.YesY--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 20:46, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
Might be worth looking at the repetition of "Rifenburg" throughout the Family section - 4 times in the first 5 sentences? Carre (talk) 19:40, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
YesY--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 21:14, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
The comments I had have been addressed. Carre (talk) 15:09, 15 December 2007 (UTC)
  • Comment:
  • Is there a reason we do not have a photo of the person in the article?
  • Can we avoid terms like glowing praise
  • It is not clear why Rifenburg did not finish higher. However, sportswriters of that era had a bias against Michigan. - This is a POV
  • Did he always perform well on the field? I am no expert on his game but I find it intriguing to see no negative criticisms on his performance in the article -- ¿Amar៛Talk to me/My edits 12:21, 14 December 2007 (UTC)
The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.