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The article was promoted 04:55, 3 September 2007.

[edit] Bobby Robson

This article has undergone extensive expansion with the help of various web sources and Robson's autobiography. It has had an image added to the Infobox courtesy of a very generous Flickr editor changing his licensing agreement upon my request, and has been copyedited by User:Dweller to remove any Ipswich bias I may have inadvertantly added. I put it up for peer review which received the attention of User:Oldelpaso who made a number of excellent suggestions, all of which have been addressed (I hope!). Therefore, I now think that the article meets the criteria of a featured article and look forward to hearing the opinions and suggestions of the community. Thanks for your time. The Rambling Man 10:33, 29 August 2007 (UTC)

  • Comment as copyeditor, I think I'm probably ineligible to support or oppose, but I want to point out that this biography has been extensively reworked and should be pretty free of hagiography. TRM has done (another) magnificent job, culminating in his "holy grail" search for a properly licensed photo. As someone who's worked closely with TRM in the past, I can assure any reviewers that specific issues raised here will be responded to, and I urge anyone reading this to review the article and respond here. --Dweller 12:26, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
  • Support A fantastic article, kudos to TRM. My only quibble is - should the references which cite his book really be under the heading "Internet".....? ChrisTheDude 12:41, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
    Indeed, a very good point. I've modified it now, so we have a Further reading and a References section instead of subsections for Print and Internet. Cheers! The Rambling Man 12:47, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
  • Y Done Oppose Nothing about his work for ITV. Buc 14:59, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
    Thanks for noting that, I've added a sentence that he has worked as a pundit for ITV. It's not that notable however, so I'm not going to dwell on it. The Rambling Man 15:16, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
    • he was more than a pundit for the world cup. He was a commentator for them for about 5 years. It dosen't need much info just needs to be mentioned. Buc 15:51, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
  • I had a look around for a source for his ITV work and found this, which suggests he was only a commentator in 2002. I've also found a mention of him commentating at Euro 2004 on the BBC website, which I'll add. Dave101→talk  17:02, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
    • Ok I'll remove my Oppose until I can give the article a propper review. Buc 17:19, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
Comments from Kevin McE
  • Support, though not entirely wholeheartedly as it stands.

Its very thorough and well referenced, and has good layout and balance, although it is rather too journalistic in style for my taste in Wikipedia. Is there independent verification that Porto would have been obliged to allow him to speak to an English club? That is the only claim that I can see being queriable, but if there is only Robson's recollection, then it is not being neutrally reported. There is no citation of the comments about Toon fans made prior to Robson's dismissal from St James' Park: were these Shepherd's comments, or something that Robson said?

Expanded the quote section to explain what it was and cite it. The Rambling Man 17:20, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
I don't think I can make additional citation for the contract thing. That would be 100% personal between Robson and the club. Would you rather I remove it or put it in quotes or something else? The Rambling Man 17:23, 30 August 2007 (UTC)

A few copyedit suggestions that you might like to consider, or you might prefer to ignore:

Brackets are a sign of informal, unencyclopaedic style: I would suggest He also made 20 appearances for England, scoring four goals.
  • Y Done I agree - blame my copyeditor! I'll remove them... The Rambling Man 19:52, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
We talk of a career spanning years: I don't think we say that it spans clubs: maybe ... his professional playing career spanned nearly 20 years during which he played for just three clubs, Fulham, West Bromwich Albion and Vancouver Royals. (Any data anywhere for his appearances in Vancouver?)
  • Y Done Yes, okay. And no, no data anywhere for his Vancouver career... sorry! The Rambling Man 20:17, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
he is International Football Consultant for RoI: any reason for the quotation marks?
"one of the most successful managers in the world": one of the 10 most successful? 30 most successful? 50? 200? No scale to measure, so not a sustainable claim if challenged. How about He achieved considerable success as a manager and then list achievements?
"one of very few": vague language like this grates with me: if the reader knows anything at all about the honours system, they will know it is a rare honour: He was knighted in 2002 for services to football
"Diagnosed a 5th time": were the 4 previous cancers all cured? Did no-one believe the first 4 doctors? This phrase seems strange and invites questions. Although it is dealt with in the body of the article, I think there could be a clearer phrasing here: He has, since 1991, had recurrent medical problems with cancer, and in May 2007 revealed that he had cancerous nodules in his lungs: he vowed ...
  • Y Done Ok, seems harsh but I'll go with it... The Rambling Man 20:17, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
Newcastle surely made no appreciable, not appreciative, attempt to sign him. If Robson made the mistake in his book and it is a quotation, it needs a (sic).
If his club career included time in Vancouver, then it is not an exclusively domestic playing career (I dislike the phrase anyway: makes it sound like they are playing wearing an apron and marigold gloves)
  • Y Done Well I learned something today! The Rambling Man 20:17, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
Some comma suggestions: He went on to play 257 games and score 61 goals for West Bromwich Albion but, in August 1962, he returned to Fulham after a disagreement with Albion chairman Jim Gaunt over his salary. The on-going dispute over both minimum and maximum wages in the game, instigated by Robson's team-mate Jimmy Hill and the Professional Footballers' Association, combined with the birth of Robson's second son, prompted Robson to demand a higher salary. Gaunt refused to negotiate Robson's contract, so Robson placed a transfer request and was sold to Fulham for £20,000 in a deal which doubled his salary.
  • Y Done Commas inserted per suggestions! The Rambling Man 20:17, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
Unrelated clause alert: the sales of Mullery and Marsh had not just signed for Fulham. Not really fair to write off the remaining Fulham players so comprehensively: worse teams have won FA Cups: why should it be assumed at 29 that he could not have made a further transfer to a potential title-challenging team. Soon after Robson joined Fulham, the club sold Alan Mullery and Rodney Marsh, meaning Robson's chances of securing any significant honour there were substantially reduced.
The Vancouver/San Francisco dichotomy needs some explanation.
  • Doing... Need to find something more on this... The Rambling Man 20:24, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
  • Okay, turns out that at the end of the first NASL season several franchises were in the red and this resulted in the owners of the Golden Gate Gales taking a controlling % of the Vancouver Royals. Puskas had been signed to coach San Francisco prior to this so there were two coaches for one 'team'. Interesting stuff. But no reliable sources as yet... The Rambling Man 08:04, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
  • The only info I can find is this but it's hardly a reliable source! Oh well... The Rambling Man 11:52, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
I assume that in Jan 68 Fulham offered him a non-playing contract, but the context is his playing career, so this is unclear.
  • Y Done ...sort of. Not 100% happy but had to end his playing career satisfactorily... The Rambling Man 20:24, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
I'm guessing that the preamble to his international career is a summary of the relevant portion of his autobiog. I would argue that, even if BR attributes his England call up to Vic Buckingham, Derek Kevan and Ronnie Allen, that remains an opinion, and as such unencyclopaedic. Going on tour with what amounts to a B team is not a particularly early international experience. Listing some, but not all. of the squad that he was part of sounds like name-dropping. Thus I would drastically reduce the first para of the international section: During his first spell at Fulham, Robson participated in two ambassadorial Football Association tours: to the West Indies in 1955 and to South Africa in 1956. However, it was during his time at West Bromwich Albion that he graduated to the full England squad, with is first call-up in 1956. The idea of Winterbottom having encouraged him to take a Lilleshall course, and Howe being a pal from WBA days, belong at the beginning of his managerial career and his managerial partnership with Howe respectively.
  • Y Done Yeah, I guess the journalist took over at this point. So, name-dropping removed and facts left behind. Also de-emphasised the significance of the tours as suggested. The Rambling Man 21:04, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
against a Chilean "local parks team": sounds almost bitter: in a pre-tournament friendly against a Chilean club side is neutral, and makes clear that he didn't play in the tournament itself. BR was neither captain nor challenging for the centre-back position, so the Bobby Moore quote seems odd, and the citation at this point of Robson's all-time England XI is not explained.
  • Y Done Yes, the quote was odd, I've requoted and toned down Robson's own bitter words! The stray citation is a hangover from before I started on this drive so it's gone, good spot. The Rambling Man 20:54, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
January 1968 were not struggling with 16 points: In 1959, the then England manager Walter Winterbottom suggested to Robson that he take a coaching course at Lilleshall. Robson made his debut as a manager in January 1968 at his former club Fulham who were struggling with 16 points from 24 games.
  • Y Done Moved around per suggestion. The Rambling Man 21:04, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
I know that the article cited uses the word "billboard", but the article linked, and my understanding of the word, does not include those newspaper headline sheets. Does anyone know the right name for them?
  • Y Done Not sure. Robson himself uses that phrase. I've cited the book and rephrased accordingly.
Unrelated clauses again: his reign at Ipswich didn't finish runner up in the league. His reign at Ipswich lasted 13 years, during which time the club twice finished as League runners-up, and made regular appearances in European competitions, ...
"he only brought in 14 players" means he didn't do anything else with those 14 players: he brought in only 14 players
"the call of his country": journalistic, informal language: not encyclopaedic.
The first mention of Don Howe here would seem to me the appropriate time to mention that he was a former teammate from his time at WBA.
1986 World cup: The next two matches are always subsequent to the previous one, so delete "Subsequently": comma needed between Maradona's two goals.
England completed the the six-match qualification for the 1990 World Cup without conceding a goal, and earned one of the six seeded positions in the finals.: avoiding brackets and truism (they can't have lost if they didn't concede a goal).
  • Y Done Fair, just comments now that no goals conceded. The Rambling Man 19:58, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
In the Consultant section, his job title (role, not rôle, I would suggest) for Ireland is again in inverted commas. Although it is an unusual, possible unique, job title, it is a job title and not a saying. Maybe there is a need to describe the role a little (has the FAI ever released what it expects of him?)
  • Doing... Yes, fixed as suggested, and I will attempt to expand what his role entails. The Rambling Man 20:29, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
"Robson has signed up for various sponsorships and endorsements, including most recently Carlsberg's "Best Pub Side" television commercial." "Signed up" is not encyclopaedic language: it might not be his most recent venture for long; indeed, can we be sure he hasn't done something else, of a lower profile, since that?
  • Y Done Removed the most recently bit. Reworded the sign up as well. The Rambling Man 20:29, 29 August 2007 (UTC)

There are rather more comments there than I had intended, but that is my fine-toothed comb pedant mode, and something I only bother applying if I think an article is good enough to be worth promoting as an example. Kevin McE 16:36, 29 August 2007 (UTC)

All comments gratefully accepted! Cheers Kevin. The Rambling Man 21:36, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
Heck: I didn't expect you to agree with all of them! I have edited one that you seemed to consent to here, but did not change in the article. Can I draw your attention to the verification/citation issues I mentioned in my first para. Glad to have been of service. Kevin McE 22:26, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
Yes, well I take this all very seriously!! Anyway, yes I will have a look at the other issues you've raised as well. Thanks again. The Rambling Man 16:55, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
Other comments
  • Support All my quibbles were dealt with during the peer review. Oldelpaso 21:04, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
  • Support, Great job. JACOPLANE • 2007-08-29 21:27
  • Comment My internet connection died earlier so apologies if you've fixed any of the following in the meantime:
  1. but he returned to the First Division (as Fulham didn't, or at least not in this context)
    Y Done Caught me. Yes, that's been rephrased accordingly. The Rambling Man 07:31, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
  2. Although Robson had signed professionally, his father insisted he continued to work as an electrician. (continue not continued)
    Y Done Rouge d struck. The Rambling Man 07:31, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
  3. "Robson made his debut as a manager of his former club Fulham in January 1968" - this doesn't sound quite right/clear but I'm not sure how to rephrase it. update - Ignore this, it looks like you've already fixed it.
  4. ...England team to qualify for the 1986 World Cup in Mexico.
    Y Done Hmm, some oversight! Now fixed. The Rambling Man 07:31, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
  5. Could 'malignant melanoma' be wikilinked??
    Y Done Well, melanoma can, malignant doesn't provide anything useful, so I'll link melanoma. The Rambling Man 07:31, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
  6. Mourinho—Robson looks like a double-barrelled surname. Shouldn't it be Mourinho — Robson? I'm not actually sure on the grammar for this so happy to concede to anyone who knows better.
    Y Done Removed em-dash confusion, semi-colon no avoids the double-barrelled surname query. The Rambling Man 07:31, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
  7. Technically, Ronaldo couldn't have been a €19 million signing as the Euro wasn't introduced until three years later. You could keep it in Euros with a footnote stating what I've just mentioned, or use pounds sterling or pesetas.
    Y Done All other references point to a $19.5m transfer so I've modified the reference and changed to dollars. The Rambling Man 07:31, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
  8. The point that he was given the freedom of / made freeman of Newcastle is made in two different sections, with a different reference used in either case. Is this intentional?
    Y Done I think it's okay that the point is made twice, once to assert how important he is to the folk of Newcastle, once as a personal honour, but you're right about the citation, I've used the same one now. The Rambling Man 07:46, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
  9. I've made some more detailed points about his WBA career (he was captain for two seasons, switched positions, and the Gaunt inconsistency thing again) as well as a couple of additional honours he was awarded - please see the article talk page. --Jameboy 22:49, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
    I'll head over there immediately. Thanks for your constructive and extensive comments. The Rambling Man 07:47, 30 August 2007 (UTC)

Support Comment, being a pedant I have a little comment to make. In the title you have the Post-nominal KB linked to Knight Bachelor. Knight Bachelor's have no post-nominals. As such the Sir should be piped to Knight Bachelor and the link to Knighted in the honours section should link to Knight Bachelor as well. Woodym555 15:02, 30 August 2007 (UTC)

  • I've amended this. I've also removed the boldface from the "Sir" part, as it looked a bit ugly being bold and wikilinked. Dave101→talk  15:20, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
  • Changed to support, well done, that was the only problem that i could find with it. One question though that i don't think should impact on the nom (as it is personal opinion). Why are the citations spaced like that. It expands the text and makes it hard for editors to read. Every FA nom i have seen has the breaks removed, if not the spaces. Woodym555 15:29, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
  • Sorry Woody, can you clarify that for my dull mind?! The Rambling Man 15:40, 30 August 2007 (UTC)

Happy to: having a reference like this
<ref>{{cite book
| last = Robson
| title = Farewell but Not Goodbye
| pages = p8
}}</ref>
takes up much more space on the page and in the template itself than say this:
<ref>{{cite book |last=Robson |title=Farewell but Not Goodbye |pages=p8}}</ref> I think that an editor who wants to edit the page will find it easier if the citations are not so spaced out, they split up the paragraphs. (In extreme cases the spacing in the citation templates can cause a breaching of the Wikipedia:Template limits, this is by no means an extreme case. See page history of List of English Football League managers by date of appointment for an example.) I also agree with Buc about the consistency. Citation 57 for example has two formats. I think it best to go with the 2007-08-30 one personally, and this does seem to be the most used. Woodym555 16:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)

Thanks for getting back to me. I agree that the spaces shown in my browser between the cite book and the last tags is silly, but I've tried maintaining huge articles where the template is crushed and it's virtually impossible to find what I'm looking for. To be honest, I'm not sure that it's a serious problem, look at infoboxes for example, a lot of the time they have exactly the same structure I apply (which priorities readability) and in some cases the null tags are left in place. At least I've removed those! So, respectively, may I decline from changing the way I do it? I did this for Adam Gilchrist, Ipswich Town F.C. etc and it wasn't a problem then. And I'm not sure if it's even a manual of style issue, so it probably doesn't affect FAC.
However, the consistency of references is a problem, and is due to a number of different editors referencing things at different times. I'll run through and make them consistent. Hope that'll do it! Thanks again for your detailed review! The Rambling Man 16:39, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
I said at the beginning that it is only personal preference and there won't be anything in the MOS because these types of citations are optional anyway. It is all down to the main contributors and if that is how you work, then it is fine by me!!! It is down to individual reviewers and how they edit. I still supported the article, and it was just a comment. I still think this is FA quality. Well done to all. Woodym555 16:48, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
  • Support More than happy with the updates. An outstanding and thorough article. --Jameboy 15:38, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
Bole's comment
  • Comment I'm not going to Oppose since I only found minor issues, but I did find quite a lot so I'm not going to Support just yet either.
    • "and in May 2007 revealed that he had cancerous nodules in his lungs: he vowed to "battle as I've always done" against the illness." Not sure this should be in the lead.
      • Well, that's subjective really. It sums up his spirit to fight and I think that's important. The Rambling Man 16:09, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "considerable success" POV
      • considerable removed, so just success now, no disputing that. The Rambling Man 16:08, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "As a boy, he was often taken by his father to watch Newcastle United at St James' Park, requiring a bus ride or a walk of several miles." I don't think this needs three refs.
      • Well each segment is ref'd separately so I don't see a problem. Plus two of the refs are reused. The Rambling Man 16:13, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "Robson describes Jackie Milburn and Len Shackleton as his childhood heroes." Since this is in the Early life section I think "Jackie Milburn and Len Shackleton were his childhood heroes." would be beter.
      • Not really, he didn't describe them until he wrote about them in his autobiography so that's why it's phrased the way it is, so it can be attributed. The Rambling Man 16:13, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • Can still be attributed if you phares it diffrently. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
      • Sorry, it's subjective, I'm not going to change everything based on a single opinion. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "As well as enjoying cricket" odd way to start a new paragraph since his enjoyment of cricket isn't mention again.
    • "secure [my] signature" why is my in brackets?
      • It's not in the actual quote, but replaces the tortured language while accurately reflecting what was meant --Dweller
    • First paragraph of Playing career should be in Early life
      • There's always an issue with a biography where a section should end and a new section should start so they flow nicely into each other, and I think this is okay. The Rambling Man 16:18, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • It's not about him playing professionally though. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • Well, fine, but we'll see what the consensus is. There has to be some kind of break point for each section and that's where I see it. If not then perhaps you can suggest an alternative. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "a nice club, a social club..." "never...a serious, championship-challenging club" why the three full stops? I keep seeing them thoughout the article.
      • It's an ellipsis and is typically used to indicate missing text, used in this case because that was the only text I wanted. The Rambling Man 16:07, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • Seems a bit redundent to me. If the text isn't there it's obviously not being used. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • It's conventional when quoting people. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "Football Association tours: to the West Indies in 1955 and to South Africa in 1956" makes it sound like the tours were part of the journey to these countries.
      • Fair, rephrased as 'Football Association tours in the West Indies in 1955 and South Africa in 1956... The Rambling Man 16:18, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "It was also at West Bromwich Albion that Robson" link West Bromwich Albion.
      • Really don't think there's a need to, it's linked to already a couple of times preceding this instance. The Rambling Man 16:18, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • It's the start of a new section. But if you really don't to link it shorten it to Albion. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • You don't have to keep re-linking things in new sections. It isn't mandated anywhere and I'm not going to overlink sections because it becomes cumbersome and looks awful. And Albion isn't necessarily understood universally. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
            • Most people and club names are shortened after there first mention. Buc 07:26, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

So presumably you'd want me to link Fulham again too? I'll do it. The Rambling Man 07:47, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

    • "England lost out to the Soviet Union" "out" is redundent here.
      • Indeed. out removed, slightly rephrased. The Rambling Man 16:18, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "As Robson recalled, "I never played for England again" I think "Robson never played for England again" would be better.
      • I prefer the direct quote. The Rambling Man 16:22, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • Why? Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • It's directly attributable. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
            • Does it really have to be phrased like that to be attributable? Buc 07:26, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

Yes it does. I don't understand why you have a problem with something Robson actually said? The Rambling Man 07:47, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

    • I don't like the sub-section title "Before England" it's foreshadowing the future instead of telling what the section is about. It also demeans what he did at Ipswich.
      • Perhaps... although it doesn't demean what he achieved at Ipswich at all. ITFC was his stepping stone to the ultimate accolade of English management. However, I'll make it "early club management". The Rambling Man 16:22, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • Maybe something about him having to take off Roger Osborne in the 1978 cup final.
      • No, that was purely down to Osborne collapsing from exhaustion, any manager in the world would have done the same. The Rambling Man 16:22, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • Indeed, still worth mentioning though. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • Not at all, he made thousands of substitutions in his career. The Rambling Man 06:57, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
            • It's a famous moment though. Buc 07:26, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

Not really. Not as far as Robson's life is concerned. It's more of a famous moment for Osborne. The Rambling Man 07:47, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

    • "The team won its next two matches, 3–0 and qualified for the quarter-finals." More detail please.
      • I gently disagree. The detail is there, in the information about the change of formation. Detail about who did what in the individual matches is better in the relevant articles than in Robson's biog. --Dweller 16:07, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • At least mention who they played and meybe who scored. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • This article is about Robson, not about individual scorers in matches. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
            • If you check other footballer articles who'll see scores in matches are mentioned. Buc 07:26, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

Well, I don't agree with that approach. This is about Robson, not match reports. The Rambling Man 07:47, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

  • I've added the team's beaten as a compromise. Mentioning the scorers would be too much detail, the scorers don't really have any relevance to Robson's bio. Dave101→talk  13:56, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "To this day" "As of 2007" would be better.
    • I Think there could be more about his initial anger over the hand of god goal.
      • No, it was only one goal, sure it was disappointing, that's why he gets a quote. The Rambling Man 16:28, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • But the quote is from years later. His initial anger is not mentioned. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • Not necessary, he was probably angry in hundreds of games. The more significant point is that even now he still can't forgive Maradona. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
            • But it doesn't make it clear how angry he was at the time. Buc 07:26, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
The whole of England was angry. It's not relevant - what is relevant is that he is still angry. The Rambling Man 07:47, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "this was followed by disappointment" POV
      • okay, failure. They failed to win. The Rambling Man 16:31, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "demanding "In the name of God, go" put a comma before the quote.
      • I think a colon is better, but good spot. The Rambling Man 16:28, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "it was rejected by Millichip" "Millichip rejected it" would be better.
      • I'm not a passive-voice-phobe so I'll keep it... The Rambling Man 16:26, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "succumbing to defeats" dosen't sound right
      • Could I ask why? It's acceptable English as far as I can tell? The Rambling Man 16:26, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • Makes it sound like they died. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • No it doesn't. It sounds like like succumbed to a defeat. It's perfectly acceptable English. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "This was followed by victories over Belgium and Cameroon in the knock-out stages" more detail needed.
      • Again, I think the detail of those matches is better off in specialist articles. --Dweller 16:09, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • At least mention the score and who scored. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • Why? The article is about Robson, not about the progress of England. That's all covered in the article about the World Cup in question, that's why we have the separate articles. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)

Sorry, those are covered in other articles. This is about Robson, not Platt, Lineker etc. The Rambling Man 07:47, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

    • "Robson has since said that not a day goes by when he does not think about the semi-final and other choices he might have made." Like what?
      • I don't know, he doesn't go into that in detail. He just says he could have made other choices. The Rambling Man 16:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • Remove it then or replace it with something eles. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • No, it's a quote so it's fine as it is. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
            • Put it in quotes then. Buc 07:26, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

done The Rambling Man 07:47, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

    • "a young José Mourinho" Who is José Mourinho? I know, but someone eles reading the article might not.
      • That's why it's wikilinked. The Rambling Man 16:24, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • And so it should be but a bit of info on what he went on to do would be useful.

Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC) Info added - future Porto and Chelsea manager... The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)

    • "Robson was unexpectedly sacked in December 1994" why unexpectedly?
      • Well, as that sentence continues, because the club were top of the table for the first time in fifteen years, I think that is self-explanatory. The Rambling Man 16:35, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • unexpected by who though? Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • RobsonLeagueFinishes image is too small to be able the read the text.
      • I've expanded, but similar sporting graphs on FA's such as Adam Gilchrist have the same problem, that's why it's a thumbnail so people can expand it without it overwhelming the article. The Rambling Man 16:35, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • Nothing about the rumors the 1997–98 season that he would go to celtic although this would need a ref.
      • I'm not sure how encyclopedic even referenced rumours that were proved unfounded would be. --Dweller 16:19, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • Nothing about his first match in charge of Newcastle.
      • Unless it was particularly notable for an unusual welcome given by fans or some such, why would it need to be included? --Dweller 16:19, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • It's notable because it was his first game in charge. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • No, his first game in charge of Fulham, Ipswich, PSV, Barcelona and Porto aren't mentioned. So it's consistent to not mention it unless it's actually notable. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
            • It is notable because Newcastle is his home town. Buc 07:26, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

His first home game is mentioned. That, in my opinion, is sufficient. The Rambling Man 07:47, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

    • "he was dismissed by Freddy Shepherd" "Freddy Shepherd dismissed him" would be better.
      • Does the MOS (like MS Word!) look down on passives? As a Robson biog, the emphasis on him seems appropriate --Dweller 16:19, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "The title is based on one of his infamous quotes" what is the quote and why is it infamous?
      • The quote is "(This is) farewell, but not goodbye. I'll find a citation... The Rambling Man 16:53, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • "Robson married Elsie in 1955" maiden name?
      • Can't find it, don't think it's particularly important however... The Rambling Man 16:44, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • The sub section Other business interests isn't really about his life outside football
      • It's about indirect football things, i.e. not playing or managing. The Rambling Man 16:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • Rename the section then. Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • No need. It says Other business interests. It's acceptable. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
            • It's still football though. Buc 07:26, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

I've called it other activites . The Rambling Man 07:47, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

    • No playing stats
      • They're in the infobox at the head of the article... just below Robson's head, lol. --Dweller 16:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
        • But his manager stats get a full table in a seperate section. Why don't his playing stats get this? Buc 19:42, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
          • Because like all footballers, they're in the infobox. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
            • Most footballers articles also have a full table as well. Buc 07:26, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

Not a requirement of FAC and no need to repeat information already within the article. The Rambling Man 07:47, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

    • Ref dates arin't consistent. Some have the month as a word and are links and some in numbers and are not links.
      • Fair point, I'll work on that, it's because of multiple editors working with different approaches. The Rambling Man 16:45, 30 August 2007 (UTC)

Buc 15:53, 30 August 2007 (UTC)

  • Further comments added. The Rambling Man 21:11, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
    • Ok I've struck comments which have either been done or you've convinced me. That pionts which remain are all issues where I think we'll have to agree to deagree. Buc 11:26, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
      • Thank you for your comments. I take it that because I won't implement every one of your suggestions that you still will not support the article's promotion? The Rambling Man 11:45, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
        • If I had to make a judgement it would be support but as there are minor issues I think I'll sit on the fence. FAC pages aren't really ment for voting anyway since Raul has the final say. Buc 16:05, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
          • Just out of interest, which criteria of WP:FAC do you think this article doesn't meet right now? The Rambling Man 16:10, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
            • 1a and maybe 1b Buc 16:59, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

Comment okay, I'd welcome further comments from other editors below this line, thanks! The Rambling Man 17:13, 31 August 2007 (UTC)

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