Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Angus Lewis Macdonald

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[edit] Angus Lewis Macdonald

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Self-nominator. I'm nominating this article for Featured Article status because I feel it meets the criteria and the editor who conferred Good Article status encouraged me to submit it. Bwark (talk) 20:03, 14 June 2008 (UTC)

Comment I suggest linking dates like "August 10, 1890" so they are formatted according to user preferences. Gary King (talk) 21:21, 14 June 2008 (UTC)

Support, given the nitpicky nature of the following:

  • Prose is quite excellent throughout, especially in the lead, except for the second paragraph of the "Early life and education" section. This bit is awash with repetition and rather choppy sentences; surely it could be spiced up a smidgen…
  • "Some considered him the best professor in the law school." Who is "some"?
  • Please check WP:MOSQUOTE; I see some issues with logical quotation throughout. This is one example: "He deplored what he called 'the loss of responsible government.'" Since the quoted phrase "the loss of responsible government" is not a full sentence in itself, the ending quotation mark should go outside the period.
  • "…Macdonald kept a key Liberal promise by bringing in Old Age Pensions for elderly people in need." Why capitalize "old age pensions"? The link and article do not.
  • "He oversaw a massive increase in Canada's naval forces; played a key role in a political crisis that threatened to tear the Liberal government and the country apart and incurred the wrath of Mackenzie King, a political leader whom Macdonald grew to loathe." Awkward sentence—semicolon is odd here. I would suggest splitting the sentence, long as it is.

--Kakofonous (talk) 23:13, 14 June 2008 (UTC)