User talk:Fallicarus

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Good work on your grammatical edits, Fallicarus. In a couple of places, errors still remain (for instance, the misplaced modifier in your first corrected entry for Guys and Dolls, and the run-on early in the Phantom of the Opera entry).

[edit] Elliot Morley

Good work on the environmental section, though that section seems to be a bit scattered overall. The information you provide is useful, but there's very little of it. Are there any other sides to that debate? Mcwabaunsee 21:54, 15 November 2007 (UTC)

[edit] FedEx

"...allow access to international trade and tax cut debates as well as the rules..." It appears there's some necessary information omitted from the middle of this sentence.

"...sealed a deal..." Try for a more professional sounding verb. Mcwabaunsee 21:54, 15 November 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Political Donation Contributions

Your Teamsters section is the best of these three simply because it provides more information. Can you flesh out all of these sections a bit? What kind of interests they have?

Mcwabaunsee 21:54, 15 November 2007 (UTC)