User talk:Eostrom

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[edit] Jean Harlow - unsourced claim

Hi. I'm new to Wikipedia, and just getting a feel for how things work, but I don't understand why you reverted a change I made to the Jean Harlow article.

My change was to improve (I think!) the readability of a sentence: It had the awkward construction "when she began to attend school, ... she did not learn until then" ("when" and "until then" serve the same purpose) and unnecessary phrases "a private school" (with a name like Miss Barstow's Finishing School for Girls, it'd have to be) and "with other children" (well, it's a finishing school for girls, so of course).

You reverted this change, calling it an unsourced claim, but it's exactly the same claim that was there before (except, I guess, that it doesn't explicitly claim the school is private and had multiple students). Should it be flagged as "citation needed?"

I apologize if the nature of my change wasn't clear--I know I forgot to include an edit summary.

Thanks --Eostrom 18:56, 18 March 2007 (UTC)

mea culpa. you are absolutely correct...it reads much better. i reverted back to your edits as you made them. --emerson7 | Talk 19:10, 18 March 2007 (UTC)