Talk:Elderly Instruments/Archive 1

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[edit] Peer review

I've never done a peer review, so sorry if this isn't the right format.

Feedback
  • shorten lead section
  • avoid marketing terms like "seminal"
  • passing mention in New York Times article shouldn't be treated as if the article was about the company
    • I removed the section in the lead about it and just mentioned that Elderly is mentioned in the Times, later. --Laser brain (talk) 14:37, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
  • would help article if notable musicians who have purchased instruments from this store could be found and emphasized
    • I have not found anything other than anecdotal information about famous musicians at Elderly. Nothing verifiable, mostly guys saying, "Oh yeah, I remember this one time I saw Elvis Costello there." Will keep looking though. --Laser brain (talk) 14:37, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
  • publications cited seem to be local -- any state, national or international recognition?
    • Actually, only a few are local. I cite Detroit newspapers, which are state-wide, and several nationally and internationally circulated trade and music journals. --Laser brain (talk) 14:37, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
  • nice clear writing style
Factoids I found
  • Elderly was a sponsor of Michigan's 2001 National Folk Festival.[1] [2]
  • There's a video here.[3]
  • Elderly is a dealer of Deering banjos [4]
  • Elderly sells or sold bodhráns [5]

--Edibility (talk) 14:36, 3 March 2008 (UTC)

I've addressed most of these issues except as noted above - thanks very much! --Laser brain (talk) 14:37, 5 March 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Sources

I looked for some of the publications online so they could be linked here if they're available online. Here's what I found

  • The Noise Magazine[6] - the archives aren't online right now, but they're working on it
  • The Music and Sound Retailer[7] is only available online for 2007-2008
  • The Greater Lansing Business Monthly[8] doesn't have online archives
  • here's The State News article link[9]
  • Bluegrass Now[10] online archives don't go back to 1998
  • Musical Merchandise Review[11] doesn't seem to have online archives for 2001

I thought I'd leave these notes here to save someone else looking. :) --Edibility (talk) 20:14, 5 March 2008 (UTC)

Awesome, thank you very much. Is the accessdate parameter required when you put the url parameter in cite journal? --Laser brain (talk) 21:00, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
Oops, I forgot that. It's not required as in you get a warning message, but it's required for a complete citation. But I think you already knew that ;) Thanks for the reminder! --Edibility (talk) 21:37, 5 March 2008 (UTC)