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January 19, 2008 Good article nominee Listed

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[edit] Good article nominee

Please review this article, and if you seek improvements, contact me so it can be promoted to GA status. Go to Wikipedia:Good article nominations#Film and cinema. Wildroot (talk) 17:06, 27 December 2007 (UTC)

[edit] GA review

• First of when mentioning who is in the film in the lead keep it simple such as - The film features Johnny Depp as the eponymous Edward, and also stars Winona Ryder, Dianne Weist, and Anthony Michael.
• It also has a - remove also
• Edward Scissorhands was a hit for Burton commercially and critically - International BO results please : )
• and has become a beloved film amongst both children and adults - This could be considered POV as it is an opinion. There are adults and children who love every film - and those who hate films
• "Edward Scissorhands." Name should not be in quotes
• We are introduced to local - Do not use "We"
• Possible in the plot section tell us who plays who rather than have it in the lead such as "saleswoman Peg Boggs (Diane West) as"..

I really don't see the harm in that. Wildroot (talk) 15:39, 17 January 2008 (UTC)

• Eventually, Jim attempts to implicate - remove eventually
• No need to link Christmas
• We then cut back - as above with the "We"
• After casting every other character, Burton still had Edward - "Burton still had Edward" is confusing, i know what you mean but it should be reworded
• "lack of virility." - quotes go inside the fullstop when it's only a word or two - full sentence quotes have the quotes outside
• Johnny Depp has since become Burton's muse, appearing in seven of his other films - Just Depp - "Muse"? remove "other"
• [citation needed] tag
• During pre-production on Beetlejuice felt her to be perfect - word missing
• remove link to dollars
• newest, hottest and youngest director - POV and opinion
• spent 12 weeks - Sixty different houses - keep consistent numbers or words
• Sixty different houses had to be repainted for - they didn't "have to be" painted, Burton chose to paint them - Sixty different houses were repainted for
• Do you think the expansion tag should still be there?
• to compose the score - link score
• "toss it out." - quote inside - as with "even harder than Batman."
• Should Main Titles/The Suburban Theme/scores be in italics quotes or be normal?
• remove link to America
• Grammy Award Nomination - lowercase n
• BAFTA win for Best Production Design, BAFTA award for best..
• Italics for Entertainment Weekly in references
• Authors last name comes first for references so Roger Ebert -> Ebert, Roger

Actually it's more professional using their last names first as does every other encyclopedic literature does the same. Wildroot (talk) 15:56, 15 January 2008 (UTC)

• wasn't, wouldn't, couldn't, can't, wasn't, wouldn't, wasn't, wasn't should be spelt out - was not, would not, was not etc

That be all - feel free to comment if you disagree. M3tal H3ad (talk) 05:08, 11 January 2008 (UTC)

"Kim, refusing to believe this, hastens to enter the mansion. She reunites with Edward, and Jim follows to mansion. There, she reunites with Edward. Jim follows them and attempts to kill his rival." I don't think there's actually four sentences of information in here... but I'm not clear on the editing process, and hesitant to just jump in and clean it up. 169.229.121.229 (talk) 00:56, 3 February 2008 (UTC)DF

Not to mention that it says "reunites with Edward" twice - she reunited with him twice? 163.192.21.43 (talk) 06:31, 6 February 2008 (UTC)

I removed the duplication, but as you said there are too many sentences and they aren't well linked. (210.49.178.166 (talk) 07:05, 27 February 2008 (UTC))

[edit] I made some changes....

I noticed that the 'plot' section of this article was extremely messy. The sequence was completely out of order and it jumped around a lot. I know the film quite well and this retelling of the plot was misleading and confusing. I changed the order of a few of the sentences so that it now makes sense, but unfortunately these have now been put back to the way they were previously. I would much appreciate it if this was rectified as I believe it i now too messy and confusing, and not at all an accurate portrayal of the film. (Little cupcake 13 (talk) 15:40, 21 April 2008 (UTC))

WP:MOSFILMS specifies we don't have to describe the film's plot in the same order. I think the plot section is fine considering the first two paragraphs each focus on how Edward is treated by the family and the wider community before describing the story's events. Alientraveller (talk) 15:48, 21 April 2008 (UTC)

I understand that the retelling of the plot does not need to be in the same order as the film, however it is very confusing to read, especially if someone has never seen the film. By retelling in a more correct order would make the article more readable and more understandable. I understand the idea of retelling the plot by seperating it into focussing on how Edward is treated by other characters and then telling the events of the film. However by writing it this way it seems to repeat a lot of points and seems nonsensical. The way this article is written seems as though it is written by someone who has never seen the film, instead simply writing a rehash of a review they saw in a newspaper. If you want to emphasise they way Edward is treated by other characters and then focus on the actual events of the film, you should create another section for this. Maybe titled Relationships between characters, or something. (Little cupcake 13 (talk) 16:49, 22 April 2008 (UTC))