Talk:Despair Faction

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This article was nominated for deletion on 2007-02-21. The result of the discussion was Merge to AFI (band).

[edit] Neutrality

"Known for displaying an often extraordinary level of devotion not just to AFI but also the community of fans that follow" -Questionable, I'd say. Sounds somewhat gushing to me. Undersea

What specifically is needed for cleanup here? Salkádar 21:17, 7 May 2006 (UTC)

There are minor grammar/spelling errors, but specifically, it really does read like a promo for the fan club.

29.99?

"For a one time fee of $29.99, US dollars, Despair Faction members are awarded life-long membership and receive an introductory package of AFI-related merchandise. The package is comprised of one AFI t-shirt, a poster of the band, a membership card, and an AFI patch, sticker, button, and armband. This merchandise is exclusive to the Despair Faction and is delivered to members in a special shipping box adorned with the Despair Faction's signature black heart logo." Now i love AFI, but if i wanna learn about the DF i don't want to be hit in the face with a sales pitch. Someone please, revise this!

-I'll do my best with a rewrite. Also, do not just write {fact} after a comment, references and citations need to be included.