Talk:David Lawrence (radio host)

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This entry reads as if someone copied and pasted Mr. Lawrence's resume into Wikipedia.

[edit] Saints Row contributions

"He also produced the audio for all of the radio stations, and co-wrote and polished the cut scenes between missions. Over 11,000 audio assets were delivered to Volition and THQ for the game, and he hired and produced the audio for over 100 other voice talent for the DJ work, the commercials and the side voices for the radio station network in the game."

Is there a citation available that confirms the extent of his contribution? Knowing people at THQ personally who were involved with writing for the franchise, supporting documentation detailing how and in what capacity he contributed to the cut scenes would be useful. It is likely there were indeed thousands of audio assets in the title and the inclusion of that statement implies that he was involved in the production of all of them, which could also use a supporting citation if that is indeed the case. Puppykiss12 06:32, 3 December 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Demo To Go

"Recently David has been helping individuals create their own demos with an affordable service called Demo To Go. You can make an appointment, come into his studio, record with him for about an hour, and he'll produce the finished product and you can leave with it, ready to share with the world."

This reads like an advertisement created by the entry subject or someone with a vested interest in promoting the entry subject. Puppykiss12 06:32, 3 December 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Personality section: too many vague adjectives

In “...executive producer of the award-winning network music show, The Net Music Countdown”, "award-winning” should be replaced by a specific mention of awards won.

In “the award-winning shows combine entertainment, information...”, again, “award-winning” should be replaced by a specific mention of awards won.

In fact this entire Wikipedia entry about David Lawrence is clearly just advertising, intended to boast and impress, not inform. I don't think minor revisions can fix this. The entire entry should be deleted. It could, of course, re-created in the future by somebody neutral. Rahul (talk) 22:28, 14 May 2008 (UTC)