Talk:Chiffchaff

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[edit] Good article notes

Looking good (interests me more than house martin..)

[edit] lead

  • I'd day 'migratory' or 'a migratory bird' in the lead, as migrant always reminds me of a birdbook local to a particular area describing that bird's relation to that area.
  • ..now normally treated.. - usually treated? 'normally' is not an adverb which implies consensus to me which I think id the idea here.
  • maybe mention the name is onomatopoeic in lead?
  • The female Chiffchaff builds .. -I'd lose the 'chiffchaff' here as it can get repetitive.

[edit] Elsewhere

  • Habitat and range --> Distribution and habitat
  • Combine Etymology and Systematics in Taxonomy section, with subspecies and former subspecies as separate subheadings.
  • ...that differentiates it from other.. - 'distinguishes', as what we're doing is identifying it
  • link or explain supercilium
  • prior to --> before (finicky I know but is simpler, crisper English)
  • link bracken

Only other issue is to combine 1-2 sentence paragraphs, of which there are a few, as it looks odd to read. Good work and easy fixes. Can't think of anything else unless there are some cultural depictions. Ever been on any stamps etc.? cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 22:59, 30 December 2007 (UTC)

Y Done I agree with above, and have fixed them all. There are no significant cultural references I can find (nothing in Cocker, which is the best source), but there is a stamp. There isn't enough to make a separate section, so I've added to the intro. Jimfbleak (talk) 07:03, 31 December 2007 (UTC)

Well done - for FAC hmmmmm - maybe some more on etymology and what it is called in other languages (le chiffchaff?), and taxonomy, a little on where phylloscopus is in the scheme of things. Can't think of much else - did we mention brood parasites here...?cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 11:39, 31 December 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Update

Tweaked a bit. Any other stuff about why exsul became extinct. Also, where do phylloscopidae relate to Sylviidae. One line should do on the latter. Still thinking. cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:00, 1 January 2008 (UTC)