Talk:Charles R. Drew/Comments

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I rated this as "Start for several reasons. First off, the lead paragraph needs work. It states that Drew was involved in the development of blood banks, but the body of the article doesn't support that assertion. Also, you need a lot more inline citations--at least one per paragraph is the suggestion.

The "Death section could be more tightly edited. The area of how expert drivers might have been able to get out of that predicament is just conjecture. Like they say on Dragnet, "Just the facts, M'am".

I also noticed a lot of typos and punctuation errors. This article needs a good copy editing. I did find it very interesting, and look forward to reading it again when it is more polished. Jeffpw 20:56, 2 November 2006 (UTC)