Talk:Battle of Pinjarra

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[edit] Editing

I plan to edit this page extensively. Consider it a placeholder.--Cuomo111 01:49, 22 June 2006 (UTC)

Please read WP:OWN. Whatever "placeholders" means, anyone is welcome to edit a Wikipedia article as long as they are improving it. —Moondyne 05:25, 25 June 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Neutral Point of View

This article had substantial deletions on the 20th March after someone had added extensive improvements last year to give it a neutral point of view. It is now no longer of a neutral point of view and many important pieces of information have been removed. They would be good starting points for someone looking for primary references. Could somebody explain why much of this article has been deleted and why it now has a biased point of view? Could we revert it and try and work towards a neutral article that presents the case from both the point of view of local settlers and local Aboriginals? 86.151.26.52 22:05, 8 April 2007 (UTC)

I have heavily edited and reorganised this article to provide a more detailed and accurate coverage, including references. Hope it now meets with people's approval. Does it still rank as a stub? John D. Croft 14:52, 21 May 2007 (UTC)

Greatly improved. Stub tags removed. —Moondyne 15:33, 21 May 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Quality Scale

The article does not yet rate on the quality scale. What do you people think? John D. Croft 03:20, 25 June 2007 (UTC)

Well its currently rated "B" which I think is about right per the Wikipedia:WikiProject Australia/Assessment. As a narrative, it reads really well but there a lot of stuff in there that a reader or reviewer would have no way of verifying: ie. needs lots more inline citations. There's a few statements which are possible original research. For example: "In the late afternoon, they camped at Jinjanuk, 10 miles from the mouth of the Murray River, so that they could begin the attack early next morning when they judged the Aboriginal group would be least prepared."^{[citation needed]} (my emphasis). Peacock terms "Stirling gave the natives a terrifying warning". True, but needs to be in a more neutral tone. I hope this helps. —Moondyne 05:21, 25 June 2007 (UTC)

Thanks for your comments Moondyne. I'll have a go at ammending appropriately in the next few days. Must get back to Green's "Brokjen Spears" where most of the content I believe comes, including maps which would be good to get into the article. I'll have a go at doing them soon. John D. Croft 06:48, 25 June 2007 (UTC)