Talk:Baroness (G.I. Joe)

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Contents 1 Embarassingly Un-encyclopedic 2 Odd coincidence 3 Comic Book 1st Apperance 4 Clean up tags

[edit] Embarassingly Un-encyclopedic

The section on the comics history of this character makes up the majority of the article, and I believe it's summary of the character's history is far too detailed and breathless in tone to be encyclopedic. It's not much of a summary - in places it lapses into a blow-by-blow description of fight scenes. The Marvel section alone has over 30 exclamation marks, all outside of quotes - here's a few examples:

"Hearing the commotion, Anastasia opens the door, to find the American soldier standing over her brother with a smoking gun!"

"The Baroness then pilots a small aircraft, saving the Commander from the Fort’s explosive destruction!"

"Not only has Dr. Venom has betrayed them, but the G.I.Joe team has discovered the location of the lab! How?"

"The HISS goes out of control and rolls on its side, leaking fuel in the middle of a firefight! Badly hurt, the Baroness begs Major Bludd to help her get free, but he leaves her alone as the HISS explodes around her!"

"Then, in a grand gesture of his love, he activates a series of levers in the Silent Castle, causing it to transform, and reconfigure into a larger, more majestic version of Castle Destro, proving his love is everlasting!"

I'd hate to delete a lot of content without providing a replacement, and I'm not familiar with the source material so I don't know if I could summarize this in a better fashion. Is there anybody familiar with this character who could provide a more concise and less enthusiastic summary of this material?

69.155.76.48 21:48, 1 October 2007 (UTC)

I went ahead and replaced the 31 exclamation marks with periods, it still needs a lot of pruning but it reads a bit better this way. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 69.155.76.48 (talk) 21:52, 1 October 2007 (UTC)

This is poorly written stuff that looks like it was pasted from somewhere else. Whoever visits this page or has it under watch should rewrite it. It looks to be written by someone doing work for the product line.RSido (talk) 23:12, 28 December 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Odd coincidence

Her real name is Anastasia DeCobray? She wears glasses? Anyone remember Anastasia Newkirk?

Enda80 23:37, 23 July 2006 (UTC)Enda80

[edit] Comic Book 1st Apperance

Maybe I missed it but shouldn't there be something in this article about how the Baroness first appeared in the comic books rather than the action figure line like most G.I. Joe action figures? 24.178.211.155 17:29, 29 July 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Clean up tags

Issues have been raised by more than one person regarding the length of sections of this article and the absence of citations. It would be greatly helpful if project members would pitch in and try to get this article under control. One major point is the section Marvel (Volume 1). The section should be a much briefer summary of the plot, rather than a nearly step by step retelling of the plot. Other sections need work as well. Thanks. Wildhartlivie (talk) 00:03, 13 January 2008 (UTC)