User talk:Aymeric78
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[edit] Userpage link on fr.wiki
I have added the link on your userpage, and tagged Aymeric78 with {{db-author}}. You seem to have forgotten the Utilisateur: prefix =) SpLoT // 14:36, 29 January 2007 (UTC)
- Désolé, qu'est-ce que veux-tu que je fasse? Tu as déjà créé ta page utilisateur en anglais. - SpLoT // 06:53, 29 September 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Vincent-Marie Viénot de Vaublanc
The article above is listed at Wikipedia:Good article nominations as well as at Wikipedia:Featured article candidates. If the article is at FAC with a talk page template to this effect, it should be removed from good article nominations. As it is at B class - it may have started best with a peer review, then a good article nomination, and then a feature article candidate. It has had issues regarding a semi automatic peer review which need to be addressed, Wikipedia:Peer review/Automated/September 2007. Good luck with your article as it is coming along nicely, and as it was already a feature article in the french wikipedia, a few tweaks should bring it along in the English wikipedia as well. SriMesh | talk 21:50, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
- Ahh! I see now. At any rate, you have one or two comment to putter away at now. There has been an awesome amount of work and content, good luck on bringing it up in quality! Kind Regards SriMesh | talk 22:47, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Vaublanc
Merci pour ton message, malheureusement j'ai assez peu de temps en ce moment et, tu m'en excusera, un faible intérêt pour le personnage. Je te souhaite bon courage en tout cas et je serais ravi de faire une relecture si tu en as besoin. --Bombastus (talk) 12:23, 15 February 2008 (UTC)--Bombastus (talk) 12:23, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
I should have some time this weekend. First impressions are good, though ! Dickie (talk) 12:56, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
Hi. I’ve compared your translation with the original French work (which is well-written anyway) and I’m impressed with your ability to use phrases that I wouldn’t have dreamt of using, because I’m too lazy or not as imaginative. (eg quasiment aveugle as ‘until his sight failed’. I would have been prosaic and put ‘practically blind’ . Your words are much more poetic !
This is a well-written and cleverly translated piece. I have made a few observations below. I hope you don’t get too many other old pedants as picky as me !!! Dickie (talk) 11:05, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
i) Change ‘Blason de la famille ....’ to ‘Coat-of-arms of the Vaublanc familly’ or ‘ Armorial of the....
ii) This is unclear : a member of an explorer ? maybe of the same club or group ? He was elected secretary of this assembly, under its president M. de Gouy d'Arcy, grand bailli of Melun, a fellow member of the famous explorer Louis Antoine de Bougainville.
iii) This needs an additional word : the eighth out of eleven, by 273 votes out of 345
iv) refractory – I’ve never used it - I had to look it up – better ‘rebellious’, ‘unruly’ or ‘disobedient’
v) Can you expand on ‘ the fédérés and marseillais ‘
vi) ‘he was narrowly saved from a sabre cut by a young officer of genius, Captain Louis Bertrand de Sivray’, I’m not sure who attempted to cut him or save him. I’d write ‘and he avoided an assassination attempt when a young officer, Captain Louis Bertrand de Sivray (who later made a name for himself as a general) saved him from a sabre cut.’
vii) This needs an additional word : first for Normandy, where he was reunited with his family
viii) To allay suspicions : Drop the trailing ‘s’ – now I am getting picky – ha-ha
ix) This joke doesn’t translate well : …..assistants montagnards, lui aurait crié : « Plus haut ! », Vaublanc sans se déconcerter lui aurait répondu : « Et vous plus bas ! »
x) This is awkward : ‘Napoleon did not neglect at this time to reward him for his zeal’ Better as simply ‘Napoleon rewarded him for his zeal ‘ or ‘...zealous work’
xi) ‘and gratified on 17 July 1810 with a majorat in Hannover’ - English doesn’t use gratify in this sense. Use ‘favoured’ or ‘was bestowed’
xii) Two points here: ‘although this last was not granted with letters patent and thus was not hereditary. This did not prevent him from styling himself Comte de Vaublanc, or from obtaining a reversion of this title onto the benefice of his grandson Adolphe de Segond.’
Point 1 – drop ‘last’ – it’s not necessary.
Point 2. The next sentence is unclear and verbose. Does it just mean ‘or passing the title on to his grandson Adolphe de Segond’ ?
xiii) ‘he narrowly escaped death’ :.Move the adverb, there’s a subtle difference in English (eg ‘She died quietly’ (i.e. without a sound) cf ‘She quietly died’ (no-one noticed or cared)
[edit] Vaublanc
Salut! Je suis pret a aider avec ce que je peux, mais je dois aussi travailler pas mal sur la page des municipales2008. --Petrovic-Njegos (talk) 21:29, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
