Talk:Aspen Mountain (Wyoming)

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Aspen Mountain (Wyoming) was a good article nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There are suggestions below for improving the article. Once these are addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.

Reviewed version: April 30, 2008

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[edit] Survey

WP:Good article usage is a survey of the language and style of Wikipedia editors in articles being reviewed for Good article nomination. It will help make the experience of writing Good Articles as non-threatening and satisfying as possible if all the participating editors would take a moment to answer a few questions for us, in this section please. The survey will end on April 30.

  • Would you like any additional feedback on the writing style in this article?


  • If you write a lot outside of Wikipedia, what kind of writing do you do?


  • Is your writing style influenced by any particular WikiProject or other group on Wikipedia?


At any point during this review, let us know if we recommend any edits, including markup, punctuation and language, that you feel don't fit with your writing style. Thanks for your time. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 03:36, 21 April 2008 (UTC)

[edit] GA Review

I think this is a good start for an article, but there is much to be expanded to make it to Good Article status. Nevertheless, I've seen editors do amazing things in a short period of time, so I'm going to put the article on hold for 7 days.

First, take a look at other GA-class Geology articles. Specifically, you might want to look at Crater Lake, as it is a single geological formation, much like your article here. If you're really a high achiever, check out the FA-Class Geology articles, but don't get too overwhelmed. I would approach the fine folks at WP:GEOLOGY and ask them for assistance.

You should expand the article to complete the following sections. Each section should have at least one full paragraph that is well-referenced:

  • Dimensions
  • Formation - describing the formation and geological makeup of the mountain
  • History - any human history involving the mountain and the immediate area surrounding it.

The sections should come before the radio information. I would keep one or two of the radio images and replace the others with images of the mountain itself - try the US Geological Survey or the US Department of the Interior for fair use images. I would also add a map to show its location in Wyoming.

Second, for issues within the current article:

Lead

  • Make sure your lead reflects what is in the article. You'll have to expand the lead to match expansions of the prose.
  • To say that a location on an older map was "incorrectly name(d)" is often a misnomer. Many locations have had multiple names given them by multiple cartographers who spoke different languages, as well as names given to formations by Native Americans that were re-named by settlers. I would instead say it has appeared on earlier maps as "Quaking Aspen Mountain". (Period outside of quotations)

Radio and television stations

  • Lists are not advisable in GA articles. You can convert this list to prose.

Other uses

  • References always go outside punctuation.
  • Link and/or explain this term: amateur radio repeaters. This would be considered WP:Jargon for folks like me who have no idea what radio equipment consists of.

Access

  • This section has no references. In a GA class article, every paragraph must have at least one citation.

Gallery

  • I hope with expansions the gallery will be justified, but with the amount of prose in the article now, there are too many images.


I'm going to leave a note on the WP:GEOLOGY talk page because this is a lot of work. If you have questions or need clarification, you can leave a note here or on my talk page. Good luck. --Moni3 (talk) 13:17, 23 April 2008 (UTC)

It's been seven days and few changes. I hope you'll be able to improve the article and submit it for GA in the future. --Moni3 (talk) 18:01, 30 April 2008 (UTC)