Talk:Aotearoa Cafe
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Whilst i found this article informative overall, i would question whether it has achieved a neutral point of view (would someone from the Lego forum find it neutral?), it really needs a little rewording from someone knowledgable on the subject.
especially "is also involved in...continuing the struggle against neo-colonisation" which suggests that a struggle between Aotearoa Cafe and neo-colonisation is an established fact (this isnt NPOV). I have changed this to "also claims to be involved in...continuing the struggle against neo-colonisation and"
Though this may still not the perfect wording.
"and with the release of Aocafe Chat, is now bringing Maori together in online live chat discussions"
Could be rewritten or removed so as not to give the impression of blatent self promotion, heh.
[edit] Rewording and Updates
I found some of the language used in this article to be somewhat inflammatory, so after following several of the links I edited the article toward what seems to be a more general view.
[edit] So did I
There still seemed to be a few parts that seem to be against BZPower, so I changed just a few words and it seems more NPOV.
[edit] As did I
Although I found that it was slightly less neutral then it should have been. I changed like 6 or 7 words to make it seem more unbiased, as I felt that part of the article leaned slightly in favour of BZPower. Specusci 16:14, 8 February 2007 (UTC)