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[edit] GA failed

I have reviewed this article according to the GA criteria and have failed the article due to the following reasons.

  1. Add an infobox; look to similar GA/FAs for examples of which one to use.Y
  2. Some of the sections are very short and either need to be expanded upon or merged together. For example, "Early life and education" and "Legal background and early government career" could probably be merged together. The heading titles should also be cut down some as some are almost short sentences. Y
  3. Go through the article and make sure that all inline citations go directly after the punctuation.
  4. "Fisher was known throughout his life by his nickname "Butch", from his early days as a football player for Princeton (lettered, 1933)." Incorporate the information in the parenthesis into the sentence or add a new one.Y
  5. In the "WWII government and military service" section, either expand on the single sentences or incorporate them into another paragraph. Single sentences shouldn't stand alone. "In late 1942, Fisher received a commission, and trained as a bomber navigator in the United States Army Air Forces from 1942 to 1943, with missions over France, Belgium and Germany, and returned to Washington, D.C. as an assistant to the Assistant Secretary of War in 1944." should probably be split into two sentences anyway.Y
  6. "In early 1942, Fisher and John J. McCloy were assigned to assist implementation of the War Department's legal activities for the Japanese American internmentprograms shortly after the United States entered WWII." Fix the spacing of internment programs.Y
  7. "Upon his return from Europe and exit from the Army Air Force, Fisher served as Solicitor, U.S. Department of Commerce from 1947 to 1948." Rewrite to "Upon his return from Europe and exit from the Army Air Force, Fisher served as Solicitor for the U.S. Department of Commerce from 1947 to 1948."Y
  8. "Fisher's remarkable role as Acheson's legal adviser was explained by Michael H. Cordozo" Remove remarkable, this may be seen as POV.Y
  9. Cut down on the information about MacArthur in the "The firing of General Douglas MacArthur" section. This article is about Fisher, and there doesn't need to be that much detail about his firing. The first quote could probably be removed as well.Y
  10. Put "(quoting Individual Views of Certain Members of the Joint Committee on Armed Services and Foreign Relations of the United States Senate, May 3 – June 27, 1951, p 46)" into an inline citation; it doesn't need to be shown to the readers in the text.Y
  11. "and words flew back and forth. Suddenly," These words should be rephrased to be more encyclopedic.Y
  12. "A remarkable collection of letters" Remove remarkable again.Y
  13. The Washington Post needs to be italicized.Y
  14. "Mr. Fisher." I don't think that it's necessary to call him this, especially when he was just referred to by his last name throughout the first part of the article.
  15. Go through the external links and see which ones should be removed. There are a few that just talk about Japanese Internment, but have little or no detail about Fisher. See WP:EL for more explanation. Y

The article still needs some work for it to pass as a GA. Once you have addressed these issues, consider getting a peer review or having another editor look it over before nominating it again. If you disagree with this review, you can get an alternate review at Wikipedia:Good article review. If you have any questions, let me know on my talk page and I'll get back to you as soon as I can. --Nehrams2020 05:29, 25 May 2007 (UTC)

  1. Expand on the death section. How did he die? Remember, single sentences shouldn't stand alone.Y

[edit] GA nomination on hold

I think the article has been improved and it is close to GA status. However there are still some remaining issues as follows (listed according to GA requirements):

1. As for the first requirement (It is well written),

  • The article needs a lot more links per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (links) and Wikipedia:Build the web. Relevant words and expressions such as State Department, War Department, Truman Administration, Nuclear Non-Proliferation Treaty, among many others should be linked. Y
  • Years with full dates should be linked; for example, link January 15, 2006.
  • Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), headings generally do not start with articles ('the', 'a(n)'). Also heading titles are too long, they should be shortened. Y
  • The following sentence: Adrian Sanford Fisher (January 21, 1914 - July 4, 1983) was an American lawyer and federal public servant, serving from the late 1930's through the early 1980's would be better as Adrian Sanford Fisher (January 21, 1914 - July 4, 1983) was an American lawyer and federal public servant who served from the late 1930's through the early 1980's
  • In Fisher was known throughout his life by his nickname "Butch", from his early days as a football player for Princeton, lettering in 1933, lettering should be wikilinked to Letterman.Y
  • In the sentence The Commission was established in the Executive Office of the President by Executive Order 10392 "Establishing the President's Commission on Immigration and Naturalization" (3 CFR, 1949-1953 Comp., p. 896)., the reference to the document, currently in parenthesis, should rather be on a footnote.Y
  • The "WWII government and military service" section consists of only two paragraphs, one of which has one sentence and the other two. They should be merged.Y
  • The same goes for the "Congressional Hearings on the firing of General Douglas MacArthur" section.Y
  • The caption of the pic of the Limited Nuclear Test Ban Treaty signing is too long. There's no need to put the names of everybody who was there on this article. Y

2. As for the second requirement (It is factually accurate and verifiable),

  • The "Return to private law practice" section lacks citations.Y

3. As for the third requirement (It is broad in its coverage), the article looks compliant.Y

4. As for the fourth requirement (It is neutral), the article looks compliant.Y

5. As for the fifth requirement (It is stable), the article looks compliant.Y

6. As for the sixth requirement (Any images it contains are appropriate), the article looks compliant.Y

As soon as you're done with them, please contact me and I'll check the article again. Good luck, --Victor12 04:25, 1 June 2007 (UTC)

[edit] All Edits above made June 1

I have incorporated all of the above suggestions. Sclarkson 16:22, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

I've read the article again, and there still some minor issues to be resolved before GA status:
  • Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article. I think you may have gone a little overboard with the linking. Anyway, I had some free time and corrected this, however you should keep it in mind for future articles.Y
  • The "Appointment as Dean of Georgetown Law Center" section is too short. It should be either fleshed out or merged. I would suggest merging with the "Return to private law practice" section, perhaps under a new (and shorter) title.Y
  • Make sure you don't link the same word twice in the same subsection. I've found and corrected several instances of this (with words like Supreme Court and Soviet Union), please check the whole article.Y

Good luck, --Victor12 21:32, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Edits done 6/2/07

I have incorporated your suggestions. Sclarkson 06:01, 3 June 2007 (UTC)

[edit] GA nomination passed

Congratulations! The article has now achieved GA status. Good job. For further improvement it would be a good idea to shorten section titles which are still too long in some cases. Anyway, just a minor thing. Greetings, --Victor12 01:08, 4 June 2007 (UTC)

[edit] GA Sweeps (kept)

This article has been reviewed as part of Wikipedia:WikiProject Good articles/Project quality task force. I believe the article currently meets the criteria and should remain listed as a Good article. The article history has been updated to reflect this review. Regards, Ruslik 10:06, 17 October 2007 (UTC)