Talk:Adil Kamil al-Wadi

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This page doesn't sound very encyclopediac to me-- it's choppy and is mostly composed of bullet points rather than proper paragraphs. I'm considering adding

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to the top of the page. +JeffKo427 10:25, 9 February 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Bullet point?

The allegations in the summary of evidence memos were always written in the bullet point format you are concerned about. Did you go to page 30 of his unclassified CSRT dossier? The allegations are a direct quote.

The factors are not a direct quote. A different, more extended Summary of Evidence was read out during his Administrative Review Board, That document has not yet been released. But it was read out loud, during his hearing. The bullet points are a paraphrase of the portion of the points in his 2nd Summary of Evidence memo which were read out loud. They were points in the original. Why shouldn't they be in point form in the paraphrase?

Cheers! -- Geo Swan 22:13, 9 February 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Choppy?

Could you be more specific about the aspects you find choppy? Or of inappropriate tone?

Cheers! -- Geo Swan 22:13, 9 February 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Replaced transcluded image with inline image - {{npov}} tag as per dispute on Template talk:Combatant Status Review Tribunal trailer image and caption

Replaced transcluded image with inline image - {{npov}} tag as per dispute on Template talk:Combatant Status Review Tribunal trailer image and caption. Geo Swan 14:24, 24 September 2007 (UTC)