Talk:A Very Old Man with Enormous Wings

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[edit] Not Encyclopedic

The following wording is not encyclopedic (bold mine):

"In fact, if you look at the title, you will see that its complete title is "A Very Old Man with Enormous Wings: A Tale for Children." Upon first reading, you may think this is the *last* thing you'd want to read to your child! But think of the stories of the Brothers' Grimm. Those tales also were gruesome but contained some moral lesson, created not only to excite but to instruct."

Encyclopedias do not say "you". Secondly, they do not use exclamation marks, speaking directly to the reader. Also, they don't give advice, make pleas, or requests to the reader like, "think of the stories of the Brothers' Grim". Perhaps a better way to word this would be:

"Subtitled, "A Tale for Children", the story's message is aimed at children despite its darker aspects, in similar fashion to the fairy tales of the Brothers Grimm."

--Daniel 16:20, 27 June 2007 (UTC)