Talk:1985 United States-Canadian tornado outbreak

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[edit] Inappropriate tone

A few phrases in this article caught my eye as inappropriate tone, so I tagged it as such. Here are a few examples:

• ...it was a half-mile (0.8 km) wide monster packing winds estimated at 300 mph (480 km). (Remove all references to "monster" - really not an encyclopedic description. Sounds more like a sensationalistic weather reporter.)
• The town resembled a bombed-out battlefield in the aftermath, and those were the exact words coming from the National Weather Service damage surveyors. (On the verge of being unencyclopedic - reword to state the authority which said this first, such as "The National Weather Service damage surveyors assessed the damage as...")
• What may have been (arguably) one of the most impressive tornadic events of the 20th century also occurred during this outbreak. (Who argues this? Impressive how? Quantitatively? Impressive to whom?)
• Nothing could stop this monster tornado (Monster, again, unencyclopedic. Also not needed in the context - of course nothing could stop it. This sounds more like a high school essay.)
• The sheer amount of debris being wrought by this tornado was incredible... (Which authority said it was incredible? No need to sensationalize. Smells like an essay, not an encyclopedia.)

A cleanup of this and other problems with the tone would be appreciate. Cheers, --Rkitko ^(talk) 22:43, 13 September 2007 (UTC)

• • Agreed. I've found and added a reference for one of these statements. The others I'll see what I can do.Davidals 20:41, 29 October 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Remerge the two articles?

Isn't the policy for a single system to have one article? Nature doesn't respect international borders. CrazyC83 (talk) 04:13, 2 June 2008 (UTC)