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[edit] HMS Affray

See if this article can be improved, I would eventually like to see it as a featured article (Khanada 10:22, 21 April 2006 (UTC))

[edit] Kirill Lokshin

Interesting article, but some obvious problems:

  • No references are provided. This alone would kill any nomination for featured article status.
  • The "Re-visited" section is basically one long quote; it should probably be paraphrased.
  • The list of sailors will probably cause complaints that Wikipedia is not a memorial; I'm not sure how significant these would be, or if there is any better way of presenting the information.

It's a fairly good article, but still needs some work. Kirill Lokshin 00:00, 22 April 2006 (UTC)

  • I think the list of soldiers killed should be moved to the talkpage. It certainly is relevant, just not well-suited for the main article namespaces. -- Миборовский U|T|C|M|E|Chugoku Banzai! 04:04, 28 April 2006 (UTC)
  • I think that casualties in the loss of a warship must be treated with caution. Surely for cases like HMS Hood listing 1,435 names, either on talk page or a separate linked pages, albeit a very noble and compassionate act, can't be done without putting all known names of fallen sailors, soldiers and airmen, of every country, whose is a thing, at least for a long while, well beyond the current storage capacity available on earth, sadly. dott.Piergiorgio 07:22, 25 May 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Loopy

The image in the infobox looks rather off - I recommend copying the code for that bit from one of the other naval vessel pages to get it it nice. I'd reiterate Kirill's comment on references and the "Re-visited" quote. That aside, nice job. --Loopy e 06:12, 7 May 2006 (UTC)

  • I fixed the image in the infobox. Too many pipes were causing problems. —ERcheck @ 19:41, 13 May 2006 (UTC)

[edit] dott.Piergiorgio

3 little things of note:

  1. there's a misspelling (or to be precise misbackspelling) YAFFRA isn't the exact backspelling of 'affray' whose is YARFFA
  2. Aside the trivial mispelling (dilema instead of dilemma) I feel that "dilemma" is a rather inadequate word for a desperate life-or-death situation.
  3. I'm puzzled about the inclusion of the ghost story, albeit I have a little knowledge in esoteric things, because seems rather out of place in an encyclopedia, IMVHO. dott.Piergiorgio 07:22, 25 May 2006 (UTC)
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