Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Doris Miller

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[edit] Doris Miller

I have drasticly expanded this article and would like to get any further ideas to increase the rating of this article --Wilsbadkarma 01:04, 27 December 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Kirill Lokshin

A good start. There's a lot of things that I would suggest further work on, though:

• The layout in the infobox is too tall. If you want to include an image of the cross, I'd suggest placing it side-by-side with the photo, as is done with the various USMC MOH recipient articles.
• The "Dates of Rank" and "Decorations and awards" sections should be worked into the infobox and the body of the text; bullet lists of that type should generally be avoided.
• The "Memorials" and "Popular Culture" sections are problematic (the latter one in particular). I would suggest combining the two into a single "Memorials and tributes" section (in the form of a prose summary, not a list) covering both topics.
• Most significantly, major work is needed on the referencing. Much of the article is uncited, including a number of direct quotes; see the project guidelines on citation. Beyond that, the use of only a handful of websites as sources is somewhat questionable; has this man never been covered in published historical works? I would have expected otherwise, given that he seems to have acquired a certain level of fame.

Working on these points would result in a significantly stronger article, in my opinion. Keep up the good work! Kirill Lokshin 03:24, 27 December 2006 (UTC)

• • I'm in the process of attempting to add more references however my one issue is with the image and the cross. I have them sitting side by side. I have seen the MOH infoboxes with the medal on the right and thats honestly where I got idea from. But I'm placing the images the same way. I can't get why your seeing it vertically. Oh and thanks for the input --Wilsbadkarma 09:37, 27 December 2006 (UTC)