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[edit] CSS Virginia II

First attempt at fleshing out an article on a ship. Was a stub and felt comfortable removing those. plange 22:25, 3 July 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Kirill Lokshin

Very nice article. A few general suggestions:

  • The citations should really include page numbers, as I doubt the entire book(s) being cited are relevant to this particular ship; this should also alleviate the clustering of footnotes under only two numbers.
  • The lead could be a bit longer.
  • Are there any existant images of the entire ship? Or, if not, of any ship that would have been similar in appearance?
  • I assume you just haven't finished going all the way through the article yet, but the last line ("She was raised by the United States after the U.S. Civil War.") breaks off quite abruptly. What did the US do with her once this was done?

Overall, great work! Kirill Lokshin 00:20, 4 July 2006 (UTC)

On the page number thing, how do I add that to the {{cite book}} template? There didn't seem to be a parameter for that. I've seen people do renderings, so I'll contact them and see if they'd be willing to contribute. That last sentence was actually there before me, and it didn't make sense. I think I'll take it out as I think she's still underwater-- I have an email sent to NUMA to verify....plange 00:45, 4 July 2006 (UTC)
never mind on page numbers, helps to look at the template :-) plange 00:50, 4 July 2006 (UTC)
Yeah, there's a field in there for that ;-)
I've never particularly liked it, though; if you wind up citing from a number of different pages, I generally prefer to create a separate "References" section listing the full details of the book and only using short-form citations in the footnotes (as here, for example). This is just my personal preference, though, so feel free to do whatever you're most comfortable with. Kirill Lokshin 00:55, 4 July 2006 (UTC)
Thank you so much for that tip, that makes things so much easier and cleaner! having all those cite web templates in the middle of the text can get quite messy...plange 01:32, 4 July 2006 (UTC)
How does it look now? Have addressed your suggestions except for another picture. As far as I know there is not another historical one, photo or drawing, but will hunt up modern renderings, unless that's not something we should put in there (of course getting permission first though). plange 01:47, 4 July 2006 (UTC)
Nice! I would add another paragraph to the lead summarizing her service, though; the lead should really contain major points all the way through the article. As far as images are concerned, I see no problems with using modern ones if you can get some with the appropriate copyright status. Kirill Lokshin 02:00, 4 July 2006 (UTC)
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