Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Battle of Savo Island

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[edit] Battle of Savo Island

Respectfully request a neutral review of this article, checking for errors, NPOV, etc. before final preparation for submitting for FA. It's not completely finished, however, I need to do some major work on the maps to make them more accurate before considering FA submission. I know it's been awhile since my last article submission, but I was on vacation. Cla68 04:02, 31 August 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Kirill Lokshin

Excellent article, as usual. A few points of formatting that need to be fixed, though:

  • Image captions shouldn't be unnecessarily self-referential (or web-referential); "(Click on map for larger image.)" isn't really needed.
  • The "p." in the footnotes is sort of redundant; but, in any case, it should never be capitalized.

I'd also suggest adding another paragraph to the lead; the sizes of the forces and the names of the commanders really ought to be given there in addition to being listed in the infobox.

Finally, another round of copyediting would be a good idea, as there seem to be a few errors of usage and grammar still scattered throughout the artice (e.g. "Overall commander of the naval forces involved in the Guadalcanal and Tulagi operation, as well as commander of the aircraft carrier task groups providing air cover for the landings, was Vice Admiral Frank Jack Fletcher, headquartered in the U.S. carrier Saratoga."). Kirill Lokshin 01:20, 1 September 2006 (UTC)

Corrections and copyedit done as suggested. Thank you for the review. Cla68 03:43, 1 September 2006 (UTC)
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