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[edit] Battle of Gythium

I have raised this article from a sttub to a B in a week and I want to see want can be done to improve it. Kyriakos 08:50, 15 November 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Kirill Lokshin

Some suggestions, in no particular order:

  • We ought to get at least a stub on the Roman-Spartan War, so that we can link to it.
  • The second map should be placed on the left margin, to avoid forcing a gap after the infobox.
  • The citations really need page numbers (or chapter numbers, perhaps, when no page numbers are available); as it is, giving an entire book doesn't really help a reader find this stuff in it.

More generally, any additional information would help; but I don't know how much is actually available.

(On a more minor point: is this actually known as the "Battle of Gythium"? From the description of the events, it would seem that Siege of Gythium would be a better title for this.) Kirill Lokshin 18:03, 15 November 2006 (UTC)

Ok. Thanks Kirill. Kyriakos 20:12, 15 November 2006 (UTC)
It is known as the BAttle of GYthium. Kyriakos 20:15, 15 November 2006 (UTC)
Ah, ok; if that's the term historical works use, we should follow their lead. :-) Kirill Lokshin 20:23, 15 November 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Balloonman

Just a few comments, overall a good article:

  • Watch your dates... 195 AD or BC? I know the correct answer, but if the BC isn't there somebody may assume AD.
  • Battle section is choppy and citations in this area can be condensed.
  • "Aftermath" section could use some word smithing to make a little smoother. Particularly the sentence, "Nabis attack Gythium two or three later only to retreat after being unable to capture the city but in 192 he was assassainated by the Aetolians before he had a chance to attempt another attack on the city." I felt like I had whiplash on that sentence becnause the change was so great---but again, watch the date... Balloonman 08:08, 21 November 2006 (UTC)
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