Wikipedia:WikiProject League of Copyeditors/Completed Articles Archive/December 2006

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• Wild Instinct Rintrah 16:18, 1 December 2006 (UTC) | AndonicO ^{Talk | Sign Here} 20:41, 1 December 2006 (UTC)
• Japanese automobile industry Rintrah 16:46, 30 November 2006 (UTC) --Espoo 20:45, 1 December 2006 (UTC)
• HMS Tonnant (1792) Rintrah 15:27, 21 November 2006 (UTC) -- Zocky | picture popups 17:55, 2 December 2006 (UTC) 17:55, 2 December 2006 (UTC)
• Pennfield Senior High School Trusilver 21:32, 19 November 2006 (UTC)

• The style for this article still seems choppy, but should be okay. --Sigma 7 02:32, 3 December 2006 (UTC)

• MacGregor State High School Trusilver 21:32, 19 November 2006 (UTC)

• Proofread - one reference is missing, but looks good. --Sigma 7 03:00, 3 December 2006 (UTC)

• CFA franc Rintrah 13:54, 21 November 2006 (UTC) Done. --Sigma 7 03:35, 4 December 2006 (UTC)
• X-Ray Specs (comic) also short SFinside 07:58, 4 December 2006 (UTC) Done. Rintrah 08:32, 4 December 2006 (UTC)
• Club Andino Peruano: Short. Rintrah 13:51, 3 December 2006 (UTC) Done, but the article will probably end up being deleted. *sigh* IrisWings 07:57, 7 December 2006 (UTC)

• *sigh* all the scholarship I lavished on the article will be wasted. Rintrah 08:21, 7 December 2006 (UTC)

• Chessington Community College: short. Rintrah 09:53, 4 December 2006 (UTC) Ditto. IrisWings 07:57, 7 December 2006 (UTC)
• Isaac Bear Early College High School Short. Rintrah 03:37, 5 December 2006 (UTC) And ditto again. IrisWings 07:57, 7 December 2006 (UTC)
• Bilocate Rintrah 03:18, 5 December 2006 (UTC); Done. IrisWings 08:47, 7 December 2006 (UTC)
• First Chechen War. Scan for spelling, punctuation.SFinside 19:44, 1 December 2006 (UTC) & Rintrah; Done. -- PatrickFisher 09:05, 7 December 2006 (UTC)
• Carjacking | AndonicO ^{Talk | Sign Here} 14:59, 9 December 2006 (UTC); done. Rintrah 15:39, 9 December 2006 (UTC)
• Wal-Mart employee and labor relations#Meal and rest breaks - Only this short section, which is mostly just a quote. IrisWings 07:03, 10 December 2006 (UTC); not a challenge to proofread. Rintrah 07:43, 10 December 2006 (UTC)
• Vagina dentata#Anti-rape female condom - Only this short section. IrisWings 07:03, 10 December 2006 (UTC); well... it's different to other articles. Rintrah 07:43, 10 December 2006 (UTC)
• Foam hand - Short. IrisWings 09:23, 13 December 2006 (UTC) Rintrah 14:35, 13 December 2006 (UTC)
• Master status - Short. Still needs expert attention, if anyone knows a lot about sociology. IrisWings 09:23, 13 December 2006 (UTC); that article is a load of - I mean it's done, I think. Rintrah 15:52, 13 December 2006 (UTC)
• Jann Halexander Trusilver 03:48, 23 November 2006 (UTC). Done. but the french article has a copyvio issue. I also switched some tags. --Sigma 7 19:51, 13 December 2006 (UTC) Based on additional research, I suspect that there's no problem with the french article, aside from lack of references. --Sigma 7 20:07, 13 December 2006 (UTC)
• Winnie-the-Pooh IrisWings 06:54, 9 December 2006 (UTC) No visible issues remain. --Sigma 7 21:56, 13 December 2006 (UTC)
• Telemarketing I see nothing wrong with this article. --Kyo cat^{¿Quíeres hablar?} 01:10, 16 December 2006 (UTC)
• * Smear campaign - While I believe I cleared up the grammar issues, it may have some content issues. I could only do so much. IrisWings 07:44, 16 December 2006 (UTC) Rintrah 08:08, 16 December 2006 (UTC)
• The Soup Nazi - Just needs a brief look. IrisWings 09:45, 10 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 08:12, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• The Sword in the Stone (film) - Before Disney started to suck. IrisWings 05:31, 11 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 08:24, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Omen - Short. IrisWings 23:15, 11 December 2006 (UTC) Done! Galena11 08:33, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Anuj: Short. Galena11 08:00, 17 December 2006 (UTC) Done and lol. IrisWings 09:04, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
  • What a strange article! No one has done my Element Girl yet. That was also fun to edit. Rintrah 09:34, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Andrew Seeley: Short.Galena11 07:31, 17 December 2006 (UTC); proofread also short. Rintrah 12:40, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Racist love - Pretty short, mostly quotes. IrisWings 09:21, 11 December 2006 (UTC); I hope racists do not disapprove your work and copyedit it in a racist fashion. I hate racists and racist copyediting, and nonsensical, racist racism against other races. I mean, done. Rintrah 14:02, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• The succubus in fiction IrisWings 09:21, 11 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 17:28, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Element Girl Rintrah 13:37, 3 December 2006 (UTC); Wow, a suicidal superhero...you don't see many of those (or do you?). Anyway, its done. Galena11 17:43, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Splish Splash (the park, not the song) - Short. IrisWings 06:17, 11 December 2006 (UTC) Done! Galena11 18:02, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Pregnancy#Euphemisms and colloquialisms - This section only. IrisWings 09:21, 11 December 2006 (UTC) Done, but not sure whether to put the WPLoC userbox on the talk page, since we didn't do the full article. Galena11 18:07, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Yaoi It was more of a clean-up than a copyedit... IrisWings 03:04, 26 November 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 18:29, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Pudding - Pretty short, mostly lists. IrisWings 09:21, 11 December 2006 (UTC): Done! Galena11 18:36, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Pygmy goat Rintrah 08:22, 10 December 2006 (UTC); Done and OMG are they cute! Galena11 18:44, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Hunting weapon A short article. Rintrah 18:09, 8 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 18:53, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Charlotte Kerr Rintrah 19:36, 24 November 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 19:06, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Winnie the Pooh and the Blustery Day - Pretty short. IrisWings 22:47, 8 December 2006 (UTC)|Done.--Tohru Honda13^{Sign here!} 19:16, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Donna Judge Rintrah 20:32, 24 November 2006 (UTC): Done. Galena11 19:20, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• A Night to Remember (film): Not sure if the plot synopsis needs a spoiler tag?? Galena11 20:00, 17 December 2006 (UTC); it does but someone else took care of this. Rintrah 02:47, 18 December 2006 (UTC)
• Fort (band) Rintrah 14:51, 20 November 2006 (UTC)

• One last change is replacing "EP" and "LP" with more familiar terms. While most people know the difference, the media is much more important than it's length. --Sigma 7 18:36, 7 December 2006 (UTC)

• Done. Left EP intact, but changed LP to album.Galena11 15:24, 18 December 2006 (UTC)

• 1080p Display Equipment List. It is still confusing, but I am submitting it for a proofread. Rintrah 16:21, 30 November 2006 (UTC)

• I checked over this article - given it's a major change, it still needs another pair of eyes. The most major change involved the intro that was cloning too much info from 1080p but had red links. --Sigma 7 21:39, 6 December 2006 (UTC)

• Done! Galena11 17:21, 18 December 2006 (UTC)

• Brody Jenner: Short but dull. Rintrah 03:24, 18 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 17:48, 18 December 2006 (UTC)
• Durham House (London): About a mansion which swapped possession many times. Rintrah 14:15, 18 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 18:58, 18 December 2006 (UTC)
• Disengagement theory: An outdated theory about people in nuclear families whose roles are determined by 1950s social segregation; it is only intelligible with arcane jargon. Enjoy. Rintrah 13:41, 18 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 21:03, 18 December 2006 (UTC)
• Yumeria (What an eccentric anime!) Rintrah 14:58, 1 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 21:12, 18 December 2006 (UTC)
• Premonición Short. Rintrah 05:56, 16 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 22:15, 18 December 2006 (UTC)
• Yang Xiu Rintrah 15:13, 1 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 22:46, 18 December 2006 (UTC)
• Curtis J. Humphreys: Some of it is a little confusing, but the content seems the problem. It is ready for a proofread. Rintrah 05:44, 3 December 2006 (UTC)

I checked; does not appear to have copyedit problems Hmains 20:52, 17 December 2006 (UTC)

No copyedit problems, but the style is a bit repetitive. --Sigma 7 23:04, 18 December 2006 (UTC)

• Change management auditing: I have tried to make this article readable from the stew of buzzwords and confusing sentences this article originally consisted of. In doing so, I might have introduced inaccuracies, though at least my version makes more sense. Please review. Rintrah 07:19, 3 December 2006 (UTC)

• I do not see copyedit problems; I do not see content problems; this is in line with the change management processes at my software job. Hmains 20:52, 17 December 2006 (UTC)

• Done!Galena11 20:34, 20 December 2006 (UTC)

• Ann Purzner: I cleaned up someone's attack page. Rintrah 03:18, 18 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 20:58, 20 December 2006 (UTC)
• Wild Things Rintrah 14:09, 9 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 21:30, 20 December 2006 (UTC)
• Al-Mu'tamid: I copyedited this confused account into something equally confused but hopefully better written. I leave the proofreading to you at your pleasure. Rintrah 12:35, 18 December 2006 (UTC)

• Sorry, Rintrah--I re-edited this one after you did, I think. It could probably use one more set of eyes before we call it "final". Also note: My style guide didn't have any guidance on Islamic proper names, so I checked related articles and it appears that the "al-" in this name (and similar names) is not capitalized, except at the beginning of sentences. If anyone else knows differently, please edit accordingly. Thanks! Galena11 23:30, 18 December 2006 (UTC)

Hmains did a copyedit after this posted (thanks, Hmains!), so I think we're ok on this one.Galena11 17:06, 21 December 2006 (UTC)

That's ok. I was so confused, I didn't know what I was doing. The article needed a reorganisation, which I was too lazy to do. Rintrah 09:00, 22 December 2006 (UTC)

• Bennie K: short. Rintrah 17:23, 3 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 21:44, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
• Pinheiros: as above. Rintrah 13:58, 4 December 2006 (UTC)

looks ok Hmains 21:10, 17 December 2006 (UTC)

made some minor changes--done now! Galena11 21:50, 21 December 2006 (UTC)

• Hypnosis#Objective signs of the hypnotic state: Breuer's absent pupillary reflex sign: Just this section. Watch the whirls spin, spin until your eyelids grow heavy. Rintrah 13:07, 17 December 2006 (UTC); Done...but I feel very sleepy.... Galena11 21:59, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
• 1990s fads and trends in North America: Despite its vacuous, revolting subject-matter, I managed to go through the whole article, toning down marketing-friendly language and removing utter nonsense. I hope you approve. Rintrah 09:34, 4 December 2006 (UTC)

I do not see any copyedit problems. Hmains 20:58, 17 December 2006 (UTC)

Proofread complete! Galena11 03:48, 22 December 2006 (UTC)

• XO-1b : About a Jupiter-like extrasolar planet. Rintrah 15:27, 3 December 2006 (UTC) Way cool! Done. Galena11 03:56, 22 December 2006 (UTC)
• Alexandre Frota: Brazilian reality/porn star. Short. Galena11; Done. The article has not enlightened me intellectually. Mind you, the article on the Puerto Rican wrestler Blitz has not either.
• İmam bayıldı - Also has a recipe section which I'm not sure whether to delete. IrisWings 01:22, 17 December 2006 (UTC); I deleted the recipe--it seemed out of place for wikipedia. Galena11 16:27, 22 December 2006 (UTC)
• Aún Asi Te Vas: Short. Galena11 02:06, 22 December 2006 (UTC)|Done! There were no problems.--Tohru Honda13^{Sign here!} 19:41, 24 December 2006 (UTC)
• Beatles-A-Rama: An internet radio station specializing in the music of the Fab Four. Short.Galena11 18:41, 26 December 2006 (UTC)

I made a few quick changes and reworks to one section. Call it done? - skrshawk ( Talk | Contribs ) 21:08, 26 December 2006 (UTC)

Works for me! Galena11 22:32, 26 December 2006 (UTC)

• Mattress IrisWings 06:53, 12 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 20:55, 27 December 2006 (UTC)
• Bakersfield, California This has almost exhausted my patience. If anyone else wants to help, please do everything from Highways. It is too big. I am getting continually growing more frustrated with it and putting less effort into it.Rintrah 14:43, 20 November 2006 (UTC)

• OMG, it's down to 30k. Someone please take a final look. :) IrisWings 06:21, 7 December 2006 (UTC) (P.S. I reorganized the sections but didn't change anything you'd done, Rintrah.)

• Referenced (5!) and overhauled the Highway and culture section; so now it's just everything after Culture :) --Brisbane2000 15:19, 27 December 2006 (UTC)
• Edited the rest as well, think it's ready for a proofread. Brisbane2000 22:20, 27 December 2006 (UTC)

• Done! Praise the lord and pass the whiskey! Galena11 21:41, 28 December 2006 (UTC)

• Dachau: A decent translation from a German article, but I found ways to improve it. Rintrah 14:44, 3 December 2006 (UTC)

• Done! This has become a fresh and crisp article! --Brisbane2000 00:15, 29 December 2006 (UTC)

• Covert operation#Examples of covert operations: Just this section. A list. Galena11 19:51, 27 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Rintrah 02:28, 29 December 2006 (UTC)
• Ana Torroja: A Spanish singer. Short. Galena11 17:57, 26 December 2006 (UTC)

Done! Gzkn 05:22, 29 December 2006 (UTC)

• Lilycove City#Mt. Pyre This section is short. --Tohru Honda13^{Sign here!} 02:16, 23 December 2006 (UTC)

Done! Gzkn 05:37, 29 December 2006 (UTC)

• Jeffrey A. Citron: Chairman of Vonage; short. Galena11 21:01, 26 December 2006 (UTC)

Done! This was a real easy one ;) Gzkn 08:35, 29 December 2006 (UTC)

• Luxury real estate: Please note that I am sick. So it's possible I have made mistakes. Rintrah 09:15, 29 December 2006 (UTC)

Done! Gzkn 12:59, 29 December 2006 (UTC)

• Blautopf: I was tempted to remove all imperial system measurements, but this probably would have exposed me as anti-American. Rintrah 15:02, 4 December 2006 (UTC)

Done! Gzkn 13:26, 29 December 2006 (UTC)

• Intrusive thoughts "I hate wikipedia" — out, you intrusive thought! Rintrah 23:31, 29 December 2006 (UTC)

Done! Could use expansion with those familiar with psychology. I bet it could be quite an interesting article... Gzkn 02:44, 30 December 2006 (UTC)

The article is nicely ce'd, but it's a wreck - I'll fix it over the next few days, but then - since I'm not a great writer - you all will have to ce it all over again :-) SandyGeorgia (Talk) 15:01, 30 December 2006 (UTC)

I completely rewrote this article, since it was basically a stub with almost no accurate content. My prose stinks, so a new CE would be great. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 06:36, 2 January 2007 (UTC)

• Kosice public transit Rintrah 18:09, 8 December 2006 (UTC)
  • I did a run-through. Not sure about the first sentence though: "The Košice public transit system is a public transport system..." seems kind of redundant. Leaving here for now. Gzkn12:33, 29 December 2006 (UTC)

• It is redundant, and I changed it when I did my proofread. The proof is complete, but for some reason (I think having to do with the images in the article), all of the "edit" links that should be on the Level 2 header lines are down at the bottom and obscure the text. Does anyone more experienced than me know how to change it? And can you move this to the "done" section if you do manage to fix it? Galena11 04:00, 30 December 2006 (UTC)

Done Gzkn 05:15, 30 December 2006 (UTC)

• Crimson and Clover: About the song. Galena11 20:12, 27 December 2006 (UTC)

Done Gzkn 05:48, 30 December 2006 (UTC)

• Disappearing Britain: Also Short. Rintrah 07:42, 30 December 2006 (UTC); Done Gzkn 07:50, 30 December 2006 (UTC)
• Indian-Germans Rintrah 04:23, 10 December 2006 (UTC); Done! Galena11 02:23, 31 December 2006 (UTC)
• Singaporean GCE 'O' Level Changed the title (be bold right?), changed some wording, changed the introduction and some punctuation. --Brisbane2000 10:48, 27 December 2006 (UTC)

• Ran through it. "Syllabus" section is confusing and needs cleanup. Gzkn 05:35, 30 December 2006 (UTC)

• You're right! I changed it, please have another look. Brisbane2000 16:16, 30 December 2006 (UTC)

• Looks good. Done Gzkn 03:29, 31 December 2006 (UTC)

• Complete UK Hit Singles 1952-2006 Probably the shortest one yet. Gzkn 02:51, 31 December 2006 (UTC)

• Done! Very short, quick, easy, and it should be great now. Adam 06:05, 31 December 2006 (UTC)

• Elections in Zimbabwe: One more. Rintrah 18:59, 18 December 2006 (UTC)

• OK, all done, everything looks great. I double checked all the names and it looks fine. Good job! Adam 06:11, 31 December 2006 (UTC)

• Blitz (wrestler): A hilarious chemical byproduct of a testosterone accident — and I thought Element Girl was funny!

• DONE! Wikified the names of a few more wrestlers as well Adam 16:36, 31 December 2006 (UTC)

• Femslash I've spent a little while on this, and it still needs a lot of work. I find that part of my soul has died to learn that Battlestar Galactica femslash even exists. Trusilver 09:51, 24 November 2006 (UTC)
  • I occasionally work on it. Rintrah 13:27, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
    • I'll pitch in, too. Ready for proofread. Galena11 18:42, 30 December 2006 (UTC)
      • I made some followup edits; looks good. — Deckiller 16:43, 31 December 2006 (UTC)
• 527th Military Intelligence Battalion: Pretty straightforward. Galena11 04:17, 22 December 2006 (UTC)

• Looks good. Done! Adam 16:46, 31 December 2006 (UTC)