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[edit] Tom Pryce

Currently a GA, but hoping to get it to an FA. I'm hoping this Peer Review will outline a few possibilties of POV, Weasel Words, etc and a few lines that don't link technical words. Being a person who is interested in Motor Racing, I guess I don't know what is technical and what isn't. Anyway, have fun reviewing the article ;-).--Skully Collins ^Edits 14:25, 28 February 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Yannismarou

Very nice. I think it can easily pass FAC, if it has a better variety of sources. This is my review:

• "Pryce's mother recalled that he was very upset when Clark died at the Hockenheimring in the Spring of 1968." Do not wikilink single years as you did here; only full dates (check WP:MoS).

Done--Skully Collins ^Edits 10:09, 7 March 2007 (UTC)

• Some subsections like "1974" have no citations. Try to have at least one inline citation in each paragraph.
• I'm not sure if "Helmet design" is well-placed there. It interrrupts the story of 1977 - while we follow the story of his career, this section interrupts it, and then, we go back again to 1977 and his death. I you can't incorporate it somewhere else, maybe you could put it after "Death". Again this may be just a personal preference!

Done--Skully Collins ^Edits 10:09, 7 March 2007 (UTC)

• You rely a lot on a single source: Tremayne, David. More than 90% of your citations are from there. This could be a problem in FAC. Can't you vary a bit more your sources.

I guess, but the problem is that Tremayne's source is the only book that actually goes into detail about his career. Other books and websites prefer to go give a brief summary of his career, many of which prefer to talk more about the Race at Kyalami rather then his career as a whole.--Skully Collins ^Edits 10:09, 7 March 2007 (UTC)

• You don't have to repeat all the details of Tremayne's book (ISBN etc.) in each citations. And another thing you can think about is to seperate "Footnotes" from "References" (the current "References" section is not exactly a "References" section!).--Yannismarou 10:41, 4 March 2007 (UTC)

4u1e has re-formatted the reference section and I've removed the footnote section and merged it with the reference section.--Skully Collins ^Edits 10:09, 7 March 2007 (UTC)