Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Ilaiyaraaja

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[edit] Ilaiyaraaja

Article deals with an important Indian musician/composer (see article lead). It is in fairly good order structure-wise and in terms of language. The referencing for this article is fairly rigorous (consisting of academic journal articles and book chapters). There is fairly substantial material here, and the narrative is tied together fairly well. Unsure about whether article needs to be longer if it is ever to aspire for FA status. Or if its layout is fine. Or if the lead section needs to be longer/shorter/contain more info that it currently does, etc. Please take a look and comment. Merci! AppleJuggler 06:11, 18 October 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Yannismarou

Nice article and well-citated. Some remarks:

• You could add one more paragraph in the lead. Have you checked WP:LEAD?
• The information about his family could go in "Early life and education", which could be mentioned "Early life and family". This last information in "Music and Career" look like trivia information which is not good. By the way, try to expand a bit "Early life and family"; it looks stubby to me.
• "Career and music" is long. You could divide it in further sections, e.g. "Early career", "Mature career", "Traits of his art", where you could further expand and analyse.
• The fact that you have just one photo is not the best thing for FAC. It is not necessary to have more of them, but it would be nice.
• Sections "Awards and nominations","Partial discography" and "Literary works" are three sections in a row, which are long and listy. I think you should turn "Awards and nominations" into prose. Now, about "Partial Discography", I'm afraid that in FAC you'll be asked to make it even more partial! "Literary works" could also be turned into prose, but I'm not definite about the necessity of that.--Yannismarou 13:08, 19 October 2006 (UTC)