Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Glynn Lunney

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[edit] Glynn Lunney

I confirm that I have completed the WikiProject Biography 11 easy steps to producing at least a B article. This article was granted GA status over a month ago; I have expanded it significantly since then.

Since I have written this article pretty much on my own, I would appreciate any comments from outside observers. In addition, I would appreciate advice on whether it's worth nominating as a FAC. It is certainly on the short side for an FA, but I would like to improve it as much as possible. MLilburne 15:26, 25 October 2006 (UTC)

I have finally nominated this as a FAC. Thank you again for all the help. MLilburne 11:17, 5 November 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Yannismarou

Great article! I think it is worth nominating as a FAC! But wait a bit in case there is any reviewer with any other suggestions. As far as I am concerned I can't find anything important to suggest! Well-written (I'm not a native English speaker, but I think the prose is "compelling"), well-citated, everything is fine! So, some minor and possibly trivia things:

• "Family" section is too stuby. It is not nice like that. You can merge it with "Early life" ("Early life and family") if you can't expand it. Or you can expand it (and maybe rename it "Personal Life" if you have such additional information) and maybe keep it where it is. In any case, as it is now, it is not nice.
• When you mention terms like "Space Task Group", "Project Mercury", "Mission Control", "Project Gemini" etc., it would be nice to offer some further explanation of what we are talking about. For instance, I'm an ignorant of these things and many reviewers in FAC are the same. I may also be a lazy quy who does not like to link and I want some quick information right here right now! Check all these terms and see if you can add very few more words for each one.--Yannismarou 11:56, 26 October 2006 (UTC)

Thank you very much for your kind comments. I will try to make those recommended changes over the next couple of days. MLilburne 12:23, 26 October 2006 (UTC)

You could also add an infobox, but this is not a prerequisite for FAC.--Yannismarou 12:49, 26 October 2006 (UTC)

I'm not sure I'm familiar with any infoboxes that would be suitable; could you make any suggestions? MLilburne 12:55, 26 October 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Nat91

As for the infoboxes, I think Infobox Biography would be suitable.

I agree with Yannismarou. "Family" is too stubby. I'd merge it with "Early life." "Early life and family" or "Personal life" sound good. Nat91 16:10, 26 October 2006 (UTC)

Thanks. I'll try to make the changes tomorrow. (I'm going to rename "Family" as "Personal life" and see if I can expand it a little rather than merging with "Early life"... hope that's all right.) MLilburne 19:36, 26 October 2006 (UTC)

I have now added the infobox and tried to improve the "Family"/"Personal Life" section. I intend to gloss some of the NASA terms within the next couple of days. MLilburne 15:48, 27 October 2006 (UTC)