Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/George Reeves

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[edit] George Reeves

This seems like could be a Featured article.The topic seems interesting enough to me to be a featured article in the future. Right now to me it seems overly speculative and too lengthy in some parts and not lengthy in others. I'm looking for other editors to comment and suggest directions for the article to bring it to FA status. TheRingess (talk) 09:30, 24 February 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Angmering

I'm afraid it's certainly not near to FA status at the moment. A few points:
  • Right now it appears to be very under-cited, and certainly nowhere near FAC status on that criteria. The entire "Early life and career" and "Military service" sections, for example, have no inline citations at all, which really needs dealing with. "Death" and "Controversy" especially would need very careful citing of who holds these views, from reliable sources.
  • "Trivia" sections are generally frowned upon — if it's important enough to be in the article it should be incorporated somewhere into one of the other sections, and if it is truly trivial then it should be removed.
  • The "Urban legends" section seems dodgy to me, too. Either cite it or remove it, I suspect much of it will prove uncite-able.
  • Finally, if the article is eventually fully-cited and the troubleseome sections dealt with, the lead is a bit on the short side for an FA.
Basically, this article could conceivably become an FA in the future, but it will need a great deal of work, especially with citations, before that point. Angmering 13:03, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
I'm going to start implementing some of the above suggestions. TheRingess (talk) 17:04, 24 February 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Yannismarou

It needs work for FA status. This is my review:

  • The lead is too short, and does not constitute a proper summary of the article. Check WP:LEAD.
  • The article is definitely undercited. Try to have at least one inline citation in each paragraph.
  • Many prose problems. Here is a choppy half-paragraph: "Reeves' father remarried in 1925 to Helen Schultz and had children with her. He never saw his son again. George's mother moved to California to stay with her sister. There Helen Lescher married Frank Bessolo, who adopted her infant son George. The marriage lasted fifteen years." Confusing prose: "The couple then moved from Galesburg to Woolstock, where Brewer had obtained a job as a druggist in the tiny town not far from his own hometown." And even more problematic prose: "were in the film's opening scene. Contracted to Warner Bros. at the time, the actor's name became "George Reeves" and his GWTW screen credit reflects the name change. "When is then, and which is the tiny town. Maybe an overall copyediting would help.
  • "Military service" is stubby. I suggest you expand it or you merge it with another section.
  • Per WP:MoS we do not wikilink single years (1952); only full dates (January 1, 1952).
  • The inline citation go straight (without a gap) after (not before) the punctuation mark. You are not consistent.
  • "His good friend Bill Walsh, a producer at Disney Studios, gave Reeves a role in Westward Ho the Wagons (1956), in which Reeves wore a beard and mustache." Try to avoid one-sentence, stubby paragraphs like this one.
  • I suggest you get rid of the "See also" section. The only link there can be incorporated in the main text, if it is important.--Yannismarou 17:07, 3 March 2007 (UTC)
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