Wikipedia:WikiProject Australia/Peer review
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The peer review department of the Australia WikiProject conducts peer review of articles on request. The primary objective is to encourage better articles by having contributors who may not have worked on articles to examine them and provide ideas for further improvement.
The peer review process is highly flexible and can deal with articles of any quality; however, requesting reviews on very short articles may not be productive, as there is little for readers to comment on.
All reviews are conducted by fellow editors—usually members of the Australia WikiProject. While there is a general intent to expand this process to allow for review by subject experts, the preparations for this are not yet complete.
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[edit] Instructions
[edit] Requesting a review
- Add
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- Place
=== [[Name of nominated article]] ===at the top. - Below it, write your reason for nominating the article and sign by using four tildes (
~~~~). - Add
{{Wikipedia:WikiProject Australia/Peer review/Name of nominated article}}at the top of the list of requests on this page.
[edit] Responding to a request
Everyone is encouraged to comment on any request listed here. To comment on an article, please add a new section (using ==== [[User:Your name|Your name]] ====) for your comments, in order to keep multiple responses legible.
[edit] Archiving
Reviews should be archived after they have been inactive for some time, or when the article is nominated as a featured article candidate. To archive a review:
- Replace
peer-review=yeswithold-peer-review=yesin the {{WP Australia}} project banner template at the top of the article's talk page - Move
{{Wikipedia:WikiProject Australia/Peer review/Name of nominated article}}from this page to the current archive page.
[edit] Requests
[edit] Brisbane Broncos
I have done a lot to this article and would like some feedback on how the article is coming along. Just some suggestions of how it could become a feature article. SpecialWindler 06:08, 6 April 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Trams in Adelaide
Currently listed as a Good article but needs other sets of eyes to look over it, particularly as it only has one major editor to date. I'm working this towards FA and need advice on what is wrong or missing - Peripitus (Talk) 11:18, 10 March 2007 (UTC)
[edit] CloudNine
On the whole, this article looks really good. A few comments:
You may want to the change the table style to "wikitable" - it'll look nicer. See Help:Table.- fixed
It might be worth coverting the timeline into a table; see how other articles of a similar nature handle it.- Converted. Does seem to look better with the preceeding table.
Where's Adelaide? (I know where it is, but many readers might not). Add a note in the lead; perhaps after the first instance of the town's name?- Fixed - works better now as I've split the opening sentence into two and noted where adelaide is.
Check WP:MOSNUM. I have a feeling numbers such as "50" should be in word form. A minor point, however.- After reading the style manual on this I've made it consistent, using the words except in places like "expanding to 90 trams and 650 horses" where numerals and letters don't mix well
Could Kensington Gardens have it's own article? I'm not sure if Kensington Gardens (and John Stephenson Co., etc.) is a proper use of italics according to the manual of style. You may want to check usage of italics throughout the whole text.- Changed the sentence about the gardens. Looking at a map it's never going to have it's own article although it will be mentioned eventually in the associated suburb's one. Fixed the italics, as I couldn't find anywhere they were used per the style manual I've taken them out
Great Depression should be capitalized.- fixed
"Until purchased by the government, all horse tram operations were by private companies with the only government involvement the passing of legislation enabling line construction." Sentence doesn't flow too well. Could you rephrase?- Now reads "Until 1907, all horse tram operations were by private companies, with the government passing legislation authorising line construction". The line as written was poor and contained redundant parts.
tax exempt -> tax-exempt. This might only occur once in the text.- Fixed - only occurred once that I can find
Could you sum up what "turning of the sod" means? Also, it shouldn't be in italics.- Changed this to "official ceremony starting track construction" and removed the italics. Turning of the sod was a common phrase for the ceremonial digging up the first bit of grass during a construction project, but it is probably not widely used.
- Changes
- There's some punctuation missing, especially before/after footnotes. I've caught the ones I've seen. Check reference positioning also.
- I think I've caught all of this now but will not strike this out until sure.
According to WP:MOSNUM, "fifty eight" -> "fifty-eight".- fixed
"Open cross-bench trams with no weather protection on the side of the cars they became unpopular during inclement weather." This sentence doesn't make much sense to me, even after "placing" a comma in the middle of it.- that line was awful ! Changed to "They were open trams, with no weather protection on the side of the cars, and passengers seated on cross-benches"
"Victoria square" -> "Victoria Square" surely?- fixed
- Off topic, but the pictures and diagrams would be useful on Wikimedia Commons; you could then add a {{commons}} link in the External Links section.
Hopefully that's enough for now :) Feel free to strike out comments you feel you've addressed. CloudNine 14:59, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
- Thanks for the detailed commentary !- I'll see what I can fix in the next day - Peripitus (Talk) 22:03, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Minorities Research Group
It's currently a GA nominee, but is quite an obscure subject. I would like to build it to FA level. Fluffball70 22:50, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Percy Henn
I need help on getting this article to higher status. I can't find any more info - help! How can I improve the other aspects? Auroranorth (WikiDesk) 09:56, 6 March 2007 (UTC)
Wikipedia:WikiProject Australia/Peer review/Australia-Indonesia Relations can importance and rating be assigned pls DavidYork71 17:15, 22 February 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Backing Australia's Ability
I would like to hear from others what other information about BAA would be useful to add to the article. John Vandenberg 15:07, 16 February 2007 (UTC)
- Put in something about the outcomes or results - was the money spent - did it all go on buracracry or was anything achieved? Interest in science for school kids is at an all time low, so perhaps the education has been wasted.
- Given that the 5 years from 2001 are up, is there a successor plan?
- The article is mainly lists rather than prose. Wikipedia likes prose. GB 04:22, 17 February 2007 (UTC)
Great points Graeme. As far as I know, the package is primarily aimed at tertiary education and research in Australia (with a twist on trying to ensure the sector is driven by commercial profit incentives). So far I have concentrated on collating the facts, hence the lists; I'll start working on making it more of an enjoyable read. I've been creating sub-articles for the various outcomes, such as the Systemic Infrastructure Initiative. BBA was extended with the Building our Future through Science and Innovation initiative, which I have covered as a section of the article, but I havent mentioned the current state of play in the intro. John Vandenberg 05:08, 17 February 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Caloundra RSL Cup
I'm trying to get this page up to feature standards but I'm not sure on how exactly to do that. Any help would be appreciated. RockerballAustralia 00:07, 16 February 2007 (UTC)
- To begin with, the citations need work. A few of the links go to "http://www.sportzdat.com/public/?redirect_to=welcome_page", which is not sufficient. A citation must link directly to the page that provides the evidence. I suggest that you use {{cite web}} instead of {{citation}}.
- In regards to expanding the content, list all of the teams with links to the regions they play for, and when they joined the cup. Maybe list the current captains, and how long they have been captain for. Have any of the past cup players moved on to the big league? John Vandenberg 00:25, 16 February 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Peripitus
- Would suggest a history section, on who founded it and why. How was rugby competition in the area run before this ?
- Search through the local newspapers for information on the cup - especially around it's founding.
- Peripitus (Talk) 11:31, 10 March 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Office of the Chief Scientist (Australia)
I request a review because this is an official part of the Australian Government, and so I feel that it is important that any problems are picked up quickly. I also have a slight COI; my reason for writing the article is to understand the inner workings of this Office better as I will be dealing with it over the next year. I have tried to find as many references as possible for this office's activities, avoiding the departments website wherever possible, however a lot of news articles are only available for pay-per-view or subscription. John Vandenberg 10:41, 29 January 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Graeme Bartlett
- The article is pretty light on at the moment. But you do have a big reference selection. Can you say where the office is physically? How many staff does it have? Has it been in any controversies or big events? Who does it report to?
I guess there is no annual report yet!
- There are no substantial links to the article - it only seems to have one redirect and talk pages (like this one).
You could link to it from DEST page, or from a "science in Australia" article, if one exists.
- Also I would rate the article as start class (not stub as you have it).
GB 03:31, 31 January 2007 (UTC)
[edit] St Kilda, South Australia
Currently rated GA. Need other sets of eyes to look over it and find the holes before I start working towards FA status. Seems about as comprehensive as I can get for such a small suburb Peripitus (Talk) 10:30, 21 January 2007 (UTC)
[edit] James Killen
The article on Sir James Killen is a long stub and needs attention. Sir James was notable in Australian politics and passed away recently. There are plenty of sources out there for someone who has the time and inclination to do some work on this article. Thanks Wikipeterproject 11:16, 20 January 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Mount Henry Peninsula
I believe this article is coming close to being worthy of a promotion, It may even be there, and I can not think of anything I can add that will make it better, it needs to be peer reviewed. Please note that the sections on the specific Fauna are small because there are already pages about those fauna. thankyou for your help, any tips would be appreciated, but please try to be specific. Yungur 12:56, 17 January 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Peripitus
A good interesting article - just a few comments
- lead is missing a definition of what a Bush Forever Site is
- no citations or wikilinks in the Geology section
- history, flora and fauna sections have large parts that are uncited
- The introduced species should be expanded to include cats, foxes, dogs and rabbits per section 3.4.2 of the 2002 management plan
- citation # 5 is malformed - not sure what format is sought here so I havn't edited it
- needs a copyedit - I found a couple of spelling mistakes and it's worth running this through a spellchecker.
- needs a section on human uses of the peninsula park (walking trails, toilets, benches etc...) and possibly their impact
- seems to be a spelling mistake in citation 6
- I can find a news article on this that may be appropriate to incorporate
- The Press; 25/07/1996, p30 - article on creating an open cut mine near the park
Peripitus (Talk) 00:05, 22 January 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Dannii Minogue
Dannii Minogue is a popular Australian singer, songwriter, actress and fashion designer. I did a massive rewrite on the article and would like a peer review and any suggestion which would improve it to raise it to FA quality. -- Underneath-it-All 04:15, 30 December 2006 (UTC)
[edit] Trams in Australasia
Article has been totally rewritten and wondering what could be done to improve it further. L blue l
A little expansion on the WA system. Good use of image, non photo (map?) would be bonus. Alter POV comments by someone called Fred 17:15, 11 January 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Peripitus
A Few Suggestions.
- Lack of references is a problem - Prehaps use the references from the related article's appropriate sections.
- Section on Adelaide trams (I'm being parochial) is very short. From what I can find out the tram network was huge before being neglected and dismantled.
- There's nothing in the Pert/Adelaide/Sydney etc... sections on WHY the tram use was discontinued.
- There's also nothing in the Melbourne section as to why they kept the trams and expanded the network at the same time as all of the other networks were being torn up.
- Needs a section on the types of trams with particular reference (I think) to the manufacture of trams in Australia (Holden in Adelaide but also coachbuilders in Victoria etc..)
- Probably needs a section on Tram Museums in Australia
Peripitus (Talk) 08:33, 21 January 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Jindyworobak Movement
one user, who has done quite a bit of usefull work on the article, seem to wants to turn the article into a soap-box for his dubious opinions on ethnicity. i pulled him up on one or 2 points (he's scottish, & appears to have no background knowledge of aust. history or lit.) & this has since degenerated. he's started going on about my racism etc. cld be usefull if someone else commented. thnx ⇒ bsnowball 16:43, 4 December 2006 (UTC)
[edit] Peripitus
A few issues - some of which need to be addressed before any imbalance in the article can be looked at
- References - there are none that I can see from a reliable source. Needs references, for this subject preferably inline per WP:CITE
- Once this is addressed then other can start helping but, without references, it does read as an essay.
- The lead is too short and needs to summarise the article per WP:LEAD
- Some headings are not ideal... I've fixed this as I saw fit.
- There are weasel words in the article - see WP:AWT for details on this.
- 1930s and 1950s in the lead should usually not be wikilinked. Only wikilink specific dates so that date format preferences work.
- Peripitus (Talk) 02:44, 26 February 2007 (UTC)
[edit] James Ruse Agricultural High School
I had this article rated recently, with the reviewer involved recommending it be put up for a peer review. I've been working on this article for a while now, and I want to know what it would need to make GA status. I think a few more photos could help, but I don't understand the whole licensing business. And I'm also having some difficulty finding sourced information on history and co-curricular sections. --tankman 07:50, 9 August 2006 (UTC)
[edit] Peripitus
A few suggestions
- Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates) - days, months and years should not be linked unless it's a full date like January 23, 1941... not 1997
- Suggest that the table in Co-curricular activities be converted to wiki markup format rather than the current HTML format - this tends to help other editors who are unfamiliar with HTML.
- The Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings) recommends that you don't use special characters in headings - they should be dropped from the Student Representative Council (SRC), and Years X & Y sections. -> the latter should be Years X and Y
- See also section should come before the references section per Wikipedia:Guide to layout
- The table of contents is possibly too long. Consider converting merging sections or changing say ==Years 7 & 8=== to ;Years 7 & 8
- Per WP:LEAD, the lead should summarise the whole article and, unless a fact is stated there that is not in the rest of the article, does not need references (they should be where the fact is in the article).
- A fair few sections are missing the inline references that are present elsewhere ( particularly the History and Campus sections).
- Needs printed references. Try King P.(ed) (1978). James Ruse Agricultural High School is twenty years old. New South Wales: James Ruse Agricultural High School. ISBN 0959510508. , and perhaps some of the yearbooks. Also there may be a local history book on Carlingford with a section on the school. Carlingford Public School centenary, 1883-1983, ISBN 0959264604 also look promising- Peripitus (Talk) 12:09, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
[edit] TISM
I think this article can be a "good article" or even "featured article" at some stage. Personally I can see some points which need improvement, but am wondering what consensus people have on the article as to its strong/weak points and its ability to be "good" or "featured" or its rating as it stands. Gohst 13:46, 13 July 2006 (UTC)
- A few comments. In general, it needs a copyedit to make it more of an encyclopedia article and less of a whimsical music press biography - sentences like "So the reason TISM's music is simple is clear, the music they make is not challenging to listen to but, they claim, is challenging to write, and that's what makes them better musicians" have no place in an encyclopedia. It needs to shift from being an opinion sometimes based on rumor to a neutral article based in verifiable fact. I'm not sure we need such detail about the pseudonyms of the members - while it warrants mentioning, it is given about five paragraphs here. The masks section could do with some cited quotes. It needs to be careful about assuming people already have background knowledge - in "Style", it launches into an anecdote about the band being dissatisfied with Hot Dogma when this hasn't been discussed anywhere else in the article. It could also do with a history section, shifting the assorted incidents section into prose, and adding cited sources to seperate fact from fiction. The quotes section would probably be better off at Wikiquote with cited sources. Really, this is a decent article, and I'd love to see it get featured, but it'll take a bit of work to get it that far. Rebecca 14:19, 13 July 2006 (UTC)
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- Done. Took a while to ramp up the speed to get it all done but its there. Except for the wikiquote section (which I personally have no knowledge of) I beleive I've addressed all of your concerns or atleast a great many of them and have now an encyclopediac-type entry. If anything else leaps out for attention, I'll hop onto that, though if it's all well and good it should be heading over to the assessment/ratings page soon. Gohst 12:17, 21 August 2006 (UTC)
[edit] Amphibians of Australia
I want to get this article to FA status and I think that it definetly could with a bit more info. The photos column should be filled up if possible, but that will be very hard, unless I can find free licence images some were else on the net or anyone has any (please leave a note on my talk page if you have a picture of any species in a genus that doesn't have a picture). The article looks pretty good and has a good format, but probably needs a copyedit and spell check etc. Thanks - Froggydarb 06:30, 12 July 2006 (UTC)
- I don't think this is likely to be a candidate for featured article status, as most of the article is in the form of lists. However, it could well be a candidate for featured list status in its current form. Rebecca 10:08, 12 July 2006 (UTC)
- Yeah, sorry thats what I meant. Froggydarb 21:52, 12 July 2006 (UTC)
