Wikipedia:WikiProject Australia/Peer review/TISM

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[edit] TISM

I think this article can be a "good article" or even "featured article" at some stage. Personally I can see some points which need improvement, but am wondering what consensus people have on the article as to its strong/weak points and its ability to be "good" or "featured" or its rating as it stands. Gohst 13:46, 13 July 2006 (UTC)

• A few comments. In general, it needs a copyedit to make it more of an encyclopedia article and less of a whimsical music press biography - sentences like "So the reason TISM's music is simple is clear, the music they make is not challenging to listen to but, they claim, is challenging to write, and that's what makes them better musicians" have no place in an encyclopedia. It needs to shift from being an opinion sometimes based on rumor to a neutral article based in verifiable fact. I'm not sure we need such detail about the pseudonyms of the members - while it warrants mentioning, it is given about five paragraphs here. The masks section could do with some cited quotes. It needs to be careful about assuming people already have background knowledge - in "Style", it launches into an anecdote about the band being dissatisfied with Hot Dogma when this hasn't been discussed anywhere else in the article. It could also do with a history section, shifting the assorted incidents section into prose, and adding cited sources to seperate fact from fiction. The quotes section would probably be better off at Wikiquote with cited sources. Really, this is a decent article, and I'd love to see it get featured, but it'll take a bit of work to get it that far. Rebecca 14:19, 13 July 2006 (UTC)

• Done. Took a while to ramp up the speed to get it all done but its there. Except for the wikiquote section (which I personally have no knowledge of) I beleive I've addressed all of your concerns or atleast a great many of them and have now an encyclopediac-type entry. If anything else leaps out for attention, I'll hop onto that, though if it's all well and good it should be heading over to the assessment/ratings page soon. Gohst 12:17, 21 August 2006 (UTC)