Talk:Tropical Storm Beryl (2000)

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Looks good, though more Mexican impact would be nice. Have you tried Spanish sources? Hurricanehink (talk) 04:22, 23 December 2006 (UTC)

Yes I did! I have found this one while looking at Mexican hurricanes in Wikipedia. However, I have no understanding of Spanish other than counting from 1 to 10. :/ RaNdOm26 04:38, 23 December 2006 (UTC)

Hurricanehink, can you read Spanish? RaNdOm26 04:42, 23 December 2006 (UTC)

Yes, actually. It says Beryl caused $254,000 (2000 MXN pesos). That's pretty much all that is there, though. This site says someone issued a disaster declaration, as well. Hurricanehink (talk) 05:07, 23 December 2006 (UTC)

Thanks. Somebody else will have to look at those links if the info can be used in the article. I used the Google translator, and the text didn't make any sense. RaNdOm26 08:34, 23 December 2006 (UTC)

Oh, what I wrote was all that was said in those articles. They only have a little bit of info. For the first one, you'll need a currency translator to get the USD figure. For the second one, you can just say officials declared a disaster area for 15 Tamaulipas municipalities. Hurricanehink (talk) 16:26, 23 December 2006 (UTC)

Also, another image would be nice. Hurricanehink (talk) 16:26, 23 December 2006 (UTC)

I wrote exactly what you said, Ok! Have converted damage to 2000 USD, don't know how to convert to 2006 USD. RaNdOm26 08:45, 24 December 2006 (UTC)

I recommend using this site for inflation calcs. Hurricanehink (talk) 16:08, 24 December 2006 (UTC)

Thanks. Anything more I can do now? RaNdOm26 05:55, 25 December 2006 (UTC)

Try rewriting the first paragraph of the storm history. It's a bit technical and wordy. Hurricanehink (talk) 01:40, 26 December 2006 (UTC)

A rewrite???!!! Really, a little bit technical wouldn't hurt. What needs to be rewritten? RaNdOm26 04:43, 26 December 2006 (UTC)

It just seems longer than necessary, mainly in the day before it formed. Diurnal heating and the specifics of the recon flight seem unnecessary. Parts of the second are a bit wordy, as well. "Six hours later, the storm appeared to increase its speed to near 9 mph (15 km/h). This would mean that landfall would happen sooner, which lessened the likelihood that Beryl would become a hurricane" This could just be rewritten to, "The storm accelerated towards the coast, preventing the time for Beryl to strengthen. "However, Beryl failed to undergo significant intensification as was forecast, as it maintained an intensity of 50 mph (85 km/h)" could just be merged with the subsequent sentence. Hurricanehink (talk) 17:02, 26 December 2006 (UTC)

No, I think the storm history is not longer than necessary, it isn't much longer than other storm articles, including those that existed for a short time. RaNdOm26 05:50, 28 December 2006 (UTC)

<-- Yea, that looks better. Hurricanehink (talk) 05:52, 28 December 2006 (UTC)

OK, anymore I can do? I left diurnal heating/recon flight there because I think it's appropriate for a little explanation what caused the deep convection and the upgrade. RaNdOm26 06:01, 28 December 2006 (UTC)

Have you used all of the good info from the discos? Hurricanehink (talk) 06:06, 28 December 2006 (UTC)

Yes I have. I've re-checked all the ones I haven't used. Why don't you look it up yourself, if there's anything you see as important? RaNdOm26 06:15, 28 December 2006 (UTC)

If you have, then it's probably comprehensive enough. Hurricanehink (talk) 06:20, 28 December 2006 (UTC)

That's OK. RaNdOm26 06:39, 28 December 2006 (UTC)

Added HPC's rainfall page and rainfall image for Beryl. Thegreatdr 23:24, 17 January 2007 (UTC)

[edit] GA Review

1. Well-written

• Compelling prose - Pass
• Logical structure - Pass, though I'd like to see some more work on the lede. For example, could you come up with a better opening sentence?
• Follows MOS - Pass
• Jargon terms explained or wikilinked - Pass

1. Factually accurate - Pass
2. Broad - Pass from an English point of view, though there could be more info out there in Spanish sources. No biggie, though.
3. Non-Pov/Stable - Pass
4. Images - Pass

Good work Random26, I passed the GA nom. Hurricanehink (talk) 20:59, 28 December 2006 (UTC)