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[edit] Leprechaun

I've tried to improve this article from this to its current state, but I've run out of things to say. I've added references, illustrations and some more info, I could just do with some further pointers to what the article is missing, what people think needs to be added etc.

The preceeding comment was by FrancisTyers, 21:38, 21 December 2005 — please sign!

Looks like a nice article. Some points:

  • Remove the NOTOC
  • In the lead, the third sentence "... having many treasure crocks buried during war-time" is very unclear. Why during war-time?
    • I should quote this, its from Yeats. - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)
  • The lead section should briefly summarise the whole article, so add a few words about mischief and shoe-making; that would fill out the third para. of the lead
  • Seems like there ought to be more tales of leprechauns that you could put in the Mythology section
    • Yup, looking for some more. - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)
      • Filled that out some more. - FrancisTyers 01:30, 24 December 2005 (UTC)
  • In Appearance, some words about pre-Yeats ideas of leprechaun appearance; the picture caption mentions that there was less of a stereotyped idea, this could be mentioned/expanded in the text, which is currently a little terse
    • Yeah, I'm looking at the moment, its difficult to find good info on the internet though, I might try adding some stuff from the irish emigrant site or finding the McAnally book which both that and Yeats reference. - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)
  • Pop Culture might be better organised, maybe as a list
  • Re "an episode of The Simpsons" — it would be really cool to say which episode
  • For a dash separating clauses in a sentence, use the "em dash" instead of a single or double normal dash. The em dash looks like this — a bit longer than a normal dash, so it looks a bit less dwarfed by the spaces either side. Get an em dash by clicking on it in the list under the edit window, by typing "—", or (on Linux) by typing the shortcut "Compose dash dash dash". Compose is often the right alt key. (See Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dashes).)
    • Thanks, will attend to that... - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)
  • I think it's a little terse overall, and I actually think that some of the material from the older version could be restored. Eg. in pop culture, entries like this would be appropriate:
"In an episode of The Simpsons, Bartender Moe Syzlak suggests to Homer Simpson that he use a leprechaun to get rid of a curse, claiming that they arrive in the U.S. in the wheel-wells of the aircraft of Irish airline Aer Lingus."
    • Hmm, maybe, I was trying to get away from a list of pop-culture references that the original was, although maybe if the article had more in terms of the other sections it wouldn't look so skewed. - FrancisTyers 21:28, 22 December 2005 (UTC)

I did a copy editing pass to address some of the above, plus a few grammar issues. Overall, I think it's pretty good. — Johantheghost 21:22, 22 December 2005 (UTC)

Thanks :) - FrancisTyers 01:30, 24 December 2005 (UTC)
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